
It’s Prose Week! Every other week, SunWinks! alternates between a discussion of prose style and a tutorial on poetic technique. Today, it’s Part II of our series on description and imagery from the perspective of neuroscience. Last time ,we learned using concrete images isn’t just a good idea, it’s the (Natural) Law! We are hard-wired for imagery.
In a nutshell, when we read descriptions which appeal to the senses, the brain processes the information as though we were actually seeing or touching or smelling what we are reading about. And while abstract ideas are processed in the higher, cognitive portion of the brain, images and sensations are processed in a lower, more intuitive part of the brain, in much the same area of the brain where emotions are processed.
We all know this. This is why, if we want to prolong the ecstasy of lovemaking, we know the thing to do is think about baseball scores, whereas if we’re having trouble performing, it helps if we visualize Anne Hathaway or Robert Pattinson taking their clothes off. Or taking each other’s clothes off. The trick is to bring this principle into our writing. Because, as all good writers know, that’s how you, ahem, grab your reader.
Moving on, it turns out we are not just hardwired for images. Human beings also tend to think in terms of archetypal symbols, and to organize information in the form of stories. And we are finding out both of these modes of thought have a deep neurological, and even an evolutionary, basis as well.
Returning to “The Heart and the Eye: How Description Can Access Emotion†by J. T. Bushnell [Poets & Writers Magazine, February 2013. Emphases mine.]:
Many people tend to think of symbolism as a kind of mental puzzle, something that requires the logical processing of the brain’s upper region, when, in fact, symbolism is what allows a story to gather weight in the brain’s lower region, orchestrating emotional detonations so complex and powerful that they leave us stunned.
…You use your upper brain to think things over, but when you have a gut feeling, an intuition, a sense that you know something without knowing how you know it, that’s the lower region at work. Superstitions arise when the lower region’s associations outpace or outmuscle the higher region’s logic, a fairly common occurrence. If your favorite baseball team starts scoring runs when you go to the kitchen, for example, you may form an association between the scoring and the kitchen, one that can be so strong it might convince you to spend the rest of the game leaning on the fridge…
The same associative processing is at work when we read descriptions. As our upper brains are busy converting language into meaning, our lower brains are forming quick and automatic associations between the thing being described and the nature of the description. To say that a man’s hair is the color of fine cigars, or dungcolored, or grizzly-bear brown, for example, produces no real difference in hue, but it does produce a vast difference in the association it creates. Those associations can infuse objects and actions with deeper meaning, making them symbols. In fact they can load so much meaning onto a certain object that when something happens to the object, it sets off a choreography of associative reactions in the brain’s lower region.
I found a beautiful example of this technique in Alice Munro’s story “Admundsen†[The New Yorker, August 27, 2012]:
The doors banged together, and the train started back.
Then there was silence, the air like ice. Brittle-looking birch trees with black marks on their white bark, and some small, untidy evergreens, rolled up like sleepy bears. The frozen lake not level but mounded along the shore, as if the waves had turned to ice in the act of falling. And the building, with its deliberate rows of windows and its glassed-in porches at either end. Everything austere and northerly, black-and-white under the high dome of clouds. So still, so immense an enchantment.
But the birch bark not white after all, as you got closer. Grayish yellow, grayish blue, gray.
The air like ice…brittle-looking…evergreens rolled up like sleepy bears…austere and northerly… Munro’s images aren’t just visually cinematic, they symbolically, and thus viscerally, connect us with the idea that the scene just walked into is, in a word, arctic.
OK, that’s enough to chew on for now. Next time, we’ll talk about what makes human beings storytelling animals.
TO BE CONTINUED
The Prompt:
Write a passage of description or a poem. Make a deliberate choice to use at least one image which, in addition to the visual (or sensual) picture it evokes, carries a symbolic connotation which gives emotional weight to the core truth you are seeking to communicate in your piece.
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As ever,
Doug
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