by JustMe ~I'm happy to be~
Member since:
August 16, 2008

~Down to....~

February 15, 2013 04:47 PM UTC (Updated: February 15, 2013 07:16 PM UTC)
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There was something

about the way your eyes

absorbed the light

which made me

want to soak into

the depths of them

or adorn them on my skin

like jewels

rich multi-textures

tossed flecks of gold

floating up to the surface


I was spellbound by your gaze

just wanted to taste

the delicious nature of you

try to understand why

I couldn't weave the right words

find a poetic gesture to describe

the essence of who

you were to me

the love I felt down to the

marrow of my aging bones


You slipped away from

the length of my fingertips

I watched you disappear

over the horizon of my limited vision

wanted to raise my fists in anger

but I understood your gypsy ways

so there was nothing I could say

even though my need for you

was like an overlooked plum

vulnerable and exposed

lost and left to wither

in this vast snow covered orchard







 

Comments: 30

JOHN BECK Feb 15, 2013, 5:18pm UTC
Set up to be let down. Vivid with interesting metaphors. What I didn't under stand was "on" in "I watched you disappear on
over the horizon of my limited vision".
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:12pm UTC
John, I do make an occasional typo now and then....smile.
JOHN BECK Feb 15, 2013, 7:14pm UTC
A typo? That explains it.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:15pm UTC
Just a simple mistake which was not noticed when I proofread. Sorry.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:16pm UTC
Fixed! :)
JOHN BECK Feb 15, 2013, 7:17pm UTC
It's easy not to notice in your own writing.
Peter Joseph Swanson Feb 15, 2013, 5:21pm UTC
Powerful
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:13pm UTC
Thanks, Peter.
Brian Benson Feb 15, 2013, 5:40pm UTC
The holders of the light will find a goldmine in those flecks of gold. Vivid imagery, and I love the pic. You always leave me hungering for more...B
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:13pm UTC
Each poem whets your appetite for the next meal? ;)

Thanks, B.
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Feb 15, 2013, 5:58pm UTC
Love the imagery portrayed.

Featured at The Surreal Circus.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 15, 2013, 7:13pm UTC
Thanks, Carol and thank you for the feature!
Len Maxwell Feb 15, 2013, 9:10pm UTC
You continue to write beautiful love stories, some sad and some happy.

Thanks for posting to the wall of Withered Plums on The Triple Name Club where it's now featured.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
Love is the essence of everything, I think.

Thank you and thank you for the feature.
Bernard C. Feb 16, 2013, 6:05am UTC
Can't see the woods for the trees - interesting sights and visions too - nice write

Thank you for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
Thanks, Bernard.
elizabeth evans Feb 16, 2013, 7:18am UTC
Some fish do get away. Sigh.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
And some are meant to, I suppose. The ocean is wide and rich.
JOHN BECK Feb 16, 2013, 8:27am UTC
Now featured at Gather Writing Essential.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
Thank you, John!
A. F. Stewart Feb 16, 2013, 2:28pm UTC
Beautiful and well-crafted.
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:41pm UTC
Thanks, Anita.
stephen berwaldt Feb 16, 2013, 10:03pm UTC
Colloquial expression..."come on over..." Come on down...
Terrific poetry, as we have come to expect... you should know by now that love defies explanation...there are no words to describe the feeling we have when in love, yet we still try...and we can't make someone love us...it is a magical gift that comes to us, or doesn't, whether we like it or not...
It's reassuring that love can reconstitute that withered prune into a ripe and juicy plum ready to be picked and eaten...

Thank you for submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists. Now Featured.
August Lady Feb 16, 2013, 10:07pm UTC
Colloquial expression..."come on over..."

Yep, & Shania Twain perfected that to one of the Top 10 Best Selling albums of all time!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:42pm UTC
Thank you so much Stephen and thank you for the feature.

August Lady - Good point. :)
Ann Marcaida Feb 17, 2013, 12:57pm UTC
What gorgeous work! You description of the being in question is vague enough that it could be a human or non-human animal.
Ann Marcaida Feb 17, 2013, 12:58pm UTC
Tweeted!
JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Feb 18, 2013, 12:42pm UTC
Thanks, Ann!
Granny Janny Feb 21, 2013, 11:53am UTC
It's a plum of a poem and romantic in the way I love to swim in the eye of a lover.
Shelbia C. Mar 19, 2013, 9:00pm UTC
This was beautifully done.

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