(Saturday Writing Essential) Distillation

Len’s challenge this week: write a poem that reveals bits and pieces of yourself. Much like an autobiography.

I don’t do poetry. However this week’s challenge is specific, and poetry, like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder, so you may consider this as free verse, or doggerel, or maybe a haiku gone horribly wrong. I don’t care. So long as I don’t have to make the little bugger metre or rhyme.

All of this:
Will you?
She said yes!
I do.
Rest in peace dad. I’ll miss you.
It’s a fixer-upper, but we can make it work.
Mum, you’re a grandma. It’s a girl.
Reya. Reya? Reya!

Can be distilled into this:
I love you.

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Greg Schiller Jan 21, 2013, 10:09am UTC

It’s a fixer-upper, but we can make it work.

Noooooooooooo, don't do it!! Oh well, it's like "I do" and "It's a girl" A huge commitment full of joy and hardbreak. Skinned knuckles too. :)

But you are right, it all distills down to love.

Patrick M. Jan 21, 2013, 10:58pm UTC

It will probably come as no surprise, but in regards to my fixer-upper, I have not yet upped or fixed anything.
As for the skinned knuckles, yep for the house and the yard, but I refrain from comment regards the wife and daughter. Might get into trouble...
Just kidding.

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Pam Brittain Jan 21, 2013, 5:34pm UTC

Love, a wonderful thing.

Patrick M. Jan 21, 2013, 10:59pm UTC

Innit though? Doesn't always seem that way at the time, but always does when you look back.

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Janice F. Jan 21, 2013, 7:22pm UTC

What a beauty! You did a fine job!

Patrick M. Jan 21, 2013, 10:59pm UTC

Thank you Janice. You are most kind.

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Len Maxwell Jan 26, 2013, 5:41pm UTC

I really enjoyed your intro to the poem as that is something that I'd write.

Thanks for taking the SatWE challenge and I'm pleased to feature your work on Gather Writing Essential.

Patrick M. Feb 11, 2013, 5:51pm UTC

I am honoured, Len.

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