A boy sobbed in the shadows,
A guttural sound-
His broken soul crying in the ally.
His face contorted,
Fresh snot was wiped upon his sleeve.
Sorrow was a stone in his belly,
Mixed with gall.
Vomit rose to be heaved out,
Cuttingly as sin.
Splatters wet his store-bought suit.
The youngster was racked with grief.
Torn with agony,
His body sought to purge him clean.
Yellow stained the seat of his pants.
The only comfort the boy had known,
Was totally gone.
How could love abandon this young life?
Death is ruthless-
His mom will be buried noon, tomorrow.
Read the examples.
Write a poem or sketch. Use visceral, unattractive, unexpected imagery.
- Put SunWE in the title and tags.
- Share your post with Gather Writing Essential group.
- Indicate in some way which devices or techniques I should be paying attention to. (If responding to today’s, put Anti-Poetry in the title field.)
Rigorous critique wanted