The Girl With Dark Hair - WWE, 12/19/12,...

Challenge: Write us a holiday romance. A Christmas romance, Hannukah romance or any romance involving a holiday you're celebrating this time of year or any other time of year.

The Girl with Dark Hair

He spotted her dark hair

And her chirpy chatter

Among the giggling girls

There was love in the air

He searched on the mountain

Clad in pristine white

Dotted with myriad figures fair

Swaying, swishing downhill fast

Where is she, the girl with dark hair?

There she was one fine day

Right at the top having fun

Resting on her crossed skis

Caressed by the sun

When from her not too far

He addressed her

Hello Miss, don’t you wear a bra?

The cheek, he didn’t get an answer

He pursued his love-struck pursuit

Throwing his bait, a witty remark

Whenever he crossed her elusive path

Until one day at noon

Paradise Valley all white and bare

The swaying figures gone to lunch fast

He waited for her, the girl with dark hair

Knowing she would be the last

Like a princess from a fairy-tale

She came down on a cloud

Descending exactly where he stood quite pale

“You have beautiful green eyes”, he said

And invited her for lunch

They skied together all day

Swishing and swaying down the mountain

Their charmed snowy love fountain

In the evening they danced

And continued to gently sway

While listening to the piano play

“My one and only love”

To this very day this is their song

The song of their winter love affair

When he spotted her

The chirpy girl with dark hair.

©Irina Dimitric 2012

Comments: 32

Kevin E. Dec 21, 2012, 1:27am UTC

I always enjoy your work. Your imagery really brought me in to your poem. I alpine skied for 14 years. Your poem reminded me of the many times before I found my true love how I would see a girl skiing down a slope and think she skies so well and she is gorgeous. It would be so cool if we could connect but even when I saw those ladies in the lodge I was too shy to speak to them................interesting memories. I like your poem better than my memories!

Irina Dimitric Dec 21, 2012, 3:16am UTC

A lot of young men are quite shy and the girls are shy too... so many missed opportunities for a romance. As you can see, my husband to be was very cheeky and persistent. We got married that same year - in 1958...

Kathryn Flynn Dec 21, 2012, 8:14am UTC

adorable comment!

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Betty S. Dec 21, 2012, 2:37am UTC

This is a very nice poem..

Irina Dimitric Dec 21, 2012, 3:17am UTC

Thank you, Betty. I'm glad you like it.

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Vj McMullan Dec 21, 2012, 4:36am UTC

Once again you have put in the mind a lovely scenario with your poem and story.

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Bernard C. Dec 21, 2012, 5:21am UTC

Swishing and swaying all day long - something is afoot..LOL Nice poem well written

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Dec 21, 2012, 11:58am UTC

Featured

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Kathryn Flynn Dec 21, 2012, 8:15am UTC

Enjoyed this and the commentary, too!

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ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Dec 21, 2012, 11:58am UTC

I see his persistence paid off Irina.

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Len Maxwell Dec 21, 2012, 5:25pm UTC

I never thought of "don't you wear a bra" as a pickup line. Hmm...

Nicely done and thank you for posting to the Wall of Skiing on The Triple Name Club where it's now featured.

Ann Marcaida Dec 23, 2012, 4:21pm UTC

That would SUCH a non-starter for me.

Irina Dimitric Dec 24, 2012, 7:31am UTC

It was a non-starter for me too. That's why he had to pursue me for such a long time.

Pam Brittain Dec 25, 2012, 4:43pm UTC

So, do you wear a bra?

Len Maxwell Dec 25, 2012, 8:17pm UTC

I probably should, but I don't.

Irina Dimitric Dec 25, 2012, 9:08pm UTC

ha ha ha...Len, you're funny!

Irina Dimitric Dec 25, 2012, 9:15pm UTC

Pam, yes, I wear a bra and I wore it then too, but when you're resting in a semi-horizontal position, you become a bit flat-chested...that is in those days of simple bras without stiff padding!

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Richard Lynn Livesay Dec 22, 2012, 10:02am UTC

timing is everything if we don't get in the way

enjoyed the open-air ski into the heart of romance

Irina Dimitric Dec 24, 2012, 7:34am UTC

Thank you, Richard, for reading my romantic tale.

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Ann Marcaida Dec 23, 2012, 4:24pm UTC

Your wording is lovely as usual, Irina. However, I think your form could use on more run through the editor. I think your long stanza would work if, say, you were describing a downhill ski. But as it stands, it probably need more breaks.

Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists. Featured.

Irina Dimitric Dec 24, 2012, 7:29am UTC

I can see your point about the breaks, Ann. Tomorrow I'll go into edit and fix the long stanza - I already know where I can put the breaks. I appreciate your feedback very much and the feature too, of course.