by Vj McMullan
Member since:
September 18, 2011

Fly a Kite

September 20, 2012 05:37 AM UTC (Updated: September 22, 2012 12:33 AM UTC)
views: 0 | 10 people recommend this | comments: 13

You have taught me well

As you freely shall sail

Upward aiming your sky

I hereby wish power your strings

Offering world you roam

Chance belies chance

Where open meadows deflect

And lined buildings meet

One misses, while tract defeat

Removing your tail

Hence, gloating your fail

Descention through air

Cloudless, unprotected your fall

You saying no fair

Why, because it's you

Not me nor they

I want the tad delight

Imagine Pacific wind further 

slinkes your flight

This you taught me

And this you will know

Aren't you glad that

'You have taught me well.'

 

 

 

Comments: 13

JOHN BECK Sep 20, 2012, 6:26am UTC
Sounds like revenge on a parent or similar relationship.
Vj McMullan Sep 20, 2012, 7:18am UTC
The poem is inspired by an acquaintance's story.
wendy st. john-devereaux Sep 20, 2012, 9:03am UTC
oh my

this piece was an intersting look into a relationship that seemed both strange and strained

blessings
Rae M. Sep 20, 2012, 7:23am UTC
Has a very nice flow.
RedBird. B. Sep 20, 2012, 1:11pm UTC
The beginning of a fairytale gone bad. :)
Kevin E. Sep 20, 2012, 7:19pm UTC
There is definitely anger in your poem. It is so well written that I am more than just a little glad that it was directed at me. I agree with RedBird it is indeed a a fairytale beginning with a sour ending.
Vj McMullan Sep 20, 2012, 11:37pm UTC
If considered a fairytale, no one should inhabit this earth.
Sheila Deeth Sep 24, 2012, 8:22pm UTC
Interesting. Different take on the fate of a kite.
Vj McMullan Sep 25, 2012, 1:28am UTC
Thank you
Sandy Moore Sep 25, 2012, 11:22pm UTC
I really got caught up in your poem.

Thank you for sharing with Watching The Wind Blow By
Vj McMullan Sep 26, 2012, 5:01am UTC
Thank you
Winona (the crazy rat lady) Sep 28, 2012, 11:52pm UTC
Commenting for Comment Games September!

Sorry this isn't a "real" comment, but I'm running WAY behind.
Cynthia C. Sep 30, 2012, 9:29am UTC
Here from Comment Games September list :)

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