pastoral poem-sunwe 7/1/12

July 01, 2012 10:29 AM UTC

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Did God create this pastoral bliss?

the scent of rain and fresh fruit on my lips

My eyes take in the fresh green splendor

my feet feel the grass between my toes

Hear the sound of cattle grazing

and a lonely cow lows

The sight of happy flowers facing the sun

Does the good lord know what he has done?

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jeanne clarke Jul 1, 2012, 1:11pm UTC

I would capitalize "He" when referencing the Good Lord....yet it's still a delightful work.

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Pam Brittain Jul 1, 2012, 2:18pm UTC

This is a wonderful piece, Karen.

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Patricia J. Jul 1, 2012, 3:07pm UTC

This is a wonderful, sensitive piece, Karen. Good job!!

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karen vaughan Jul 1, 2012, 6:27pm UTC

thanks to pam and Patricia

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Doug Westberg Jul 4, 2012, 2:22am UTC

Lovely piece. Lots of colorful, visual images. I like the alliteration of fresh..fruit..fresh..feet..feels, the inexact rhyme of bliss and lips, the assonance/alliteration of sound..lonely cow lows..flowers. I like the invocation of all five senses. Very nice work! Thank you for playing SunWinks!

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