What happened in the park, The Park Problem...

(Picture the sound of a handsaw making music.)

The pretty girl strolled through the moonlit park, knowing that he would be there waiting and she always wondered why this handsome man with thick black hair and never shaven beard loved her. Love her, he did. He just couldn't say those three little words. She understood and kissed him when she found him sitting on their normal park bench. Night was the only time they could hold hands and hug each other. Night for the pretty lady was enough.

Sadly one day, those night love fests ended. Yes, they had seen the cop on his beat in the park. Too bad they didn't notice his organic oaken bat had a wooden spear on the end of it.

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This week’s writing challenge: write a comedy about a park, a policeman and a pretty girl .

Comments: 27

Janet "Jax" B. May 28, 2012, 9:06pm UTC

oh my!

Pam Brittain May 30, 2012, 3:35pm UTC

It's not my fault - I didn't write the challenge.

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Larry H. May 28, 2012, 9:32pm UTC

That isn't funny. A bat with a spear in the end of it,

elizabeth evans May 29, 2012, 7:07am UTC

I would call what's going to happen a tragedy.

Pam Brittain May 30, 2012, 3:36pm UTC

Uh Oh, Larry. Am I in trouble? Alas, it was a tragedy.

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JOHN BECK May 28, 2012, 11:39pm UTC

Hmmmm. Not a real cop, presumably. Ouch!

Pam Brittain May 30, 2012, 3:37pm UTC

Whatever your imagination tell you.

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William Dotani May 29, 2012, 1:47am UTC

He wasn't a cop, but Capt. Ahab who had taken a part time job hunting Vampires. Cool tale.

Kingston Kaprinski May 29, 2012, 11:49am UTC

imaginative leap. A genre mash-up, like a character in a Herman Melville novel, Moby-Dick, walking into a scene of a Dickens' novel, Great Expectations, or something like that. I'd like to think the tip of the spear could puncture tragedy and turn it into a comedy. I seem to recall that in drama it's necessary to provide comic relief. It's works the other way around, too. A comedy needs to be supported by a tragic episode or two.

Pam Brittain May 30, 2012, 3:39pm UTC

Thanks, William and you hit the nail on the head.

Golly, Kingston, thank you, I think. Someday maybe I'll have a clue what my magic pen it doing.

William Dotani May 31, 2012, 2:04am UTC

Kingston is 99% right in my opinion. (There are always exceptions). Pathos always seems to be lurking in humor/comedy: Especially physical comedy. I really like what Kingston says. Personally, I love Dickens, but he's too old for me.
Pam, Please don't call me Maxwell Edison because I'm not majoring in medicine.

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Bernard C. May 29, 2012, 3:19am UTC

Good park scene - little confused with the word 'They' at the end... cop being a moonlighter of another sort...

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

Pam Brittain May 30, 2012, 3:41pm UTC

I re-read and agree. I'd consider it a favor it you would tell me how you would have ended it or reworded it. I can (and will) learn from your help.

Bernard C. May 31, 2012, 3:34am UTC

That is the matter of who 'they' were.. am to take it as; the girl and the hairy-guy during one of their many love nights together in the park...they got to witness a murder in progress in a bush nearby..as they saw a policeman stepping out of the bush brandishing a bloodstained truncheon and stepping away....as the hairy guy places a hand across the girls mouth in an effort to hold back her screaming out loud and not to make a sound.

The statement you make (yes they had seen..) is directed towards someone else in an interview kind of situation..and perhaps that is where the confusion or situation lies..to whom, what, where and how long after, is left out. Left to the readers imagination no less.

Pam Brittain May 31, 2012, 2:12pm UTC

Grrr. Gather ate my comment.

Bernard, I thank you with all my heart and you are absolutely right. Who were 'they'? I have been learning so much thanks to you and other Gatherites. Thank you.

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