by karen vaughan
Member since:
March 4, 2011

poetic otomatapaea(sp)--sunwe

May 20, 2012 10:43 AM UTC
views: 0 | 3 people recommend this | comments: 6

Chirp chirp said the bird

Woof said the dog

Meow replied the cat

The fish gurgled which probably meant "No"

No one could convince him,

that the humans had to go.

The bird screeched

The dog growled

The cat hissed

The fish still gurgled

He wasn't get this.

 

 

Comments: 6

Pam Brittain May 20, 2012, 4:02pm UTC
Karen, this is great. I was a little confused about the last line, but the piece is quite wonderful.
karen vaughan May 20, 2012, 4:39pm UTC
refers back to the humans have to go.
Doug Westberg May 20, 2012, 7:54pm UTC
Cute! Some personification with the onomatopoeia there! Thanks for sharing with Sunday Gather Writing Essential!
karen vaughan May 20, 2012, 9:21pm UTC
thanks Doug
Patricia J. May 23, 2012, 5:50am UTC
I like it, Karen. You done good!!
Laurun M. May 27, 2012, 7:22pm UTC
Great job. It reminds me of the old lady who swalled a fly - Oh My!

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