My Holden Barina for WWE and Mindful Poetry

My Holden Barina

My Holden Barina rhymes with ballerina

I’d write a terza rima to my Barina

If only my muse would enthuse

An Aussie car is what I like

I’m so glad she’s not a bike

My mane will stay dry in the rain

She takes me from point A to B

Humming softly as a bumble-bee

Via alleyways and highways

To park her is a piece of cake

I can do it half awake

Into smallest space squeeze with ease

My Holden Barina rhymes with ballerina

For this little beauty here’s a rima piccolina

Not Dante’s terza, but a fine rhyme of mine.

P.S., I created this form this morning. Each stanza has 3 lines ( tercet).

The first two lines rhyme.

The third line contains internal rhyme.

The rhyme pattern in this poem is as follows:

aa(bb) cc(dd) ee(ff) gg(hh) aa(jj) – internal rhyme is shown in brackets.

I’ve checked terza rima and tercet on Wikipedia where I haven’t found a form like the one I just created. (18 May 2012)

Challenge:

Write in any form you desire about: Cars and Trucks

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Comments: 37

René Allen May 18, 2012, 11:49pm UTC

Irina ~ Thank you for sharing this poetic work with us in . . .

Poet's Passion!

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:45am UTC

My pleasure.

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stephen berwaldt May 18, 2012, 11:57pm UTC

I like it... I'm not one for small cars myself, but with gas @ $4 a gallon, Maybe I should get one. :)
Nice poem.

Thank you submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:45am UTC

Thank you, Stephen.

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Len Maxwell May 19, 2012, 12:04am UTC

You just created this form this morning? If I started five thousand mornings ago, I couldn't have done that. I won't comment on the form, but the story is neat.

Thanks for posting to the New Poetry Form Wall on The Triple Name Club where it's now featured.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:47am UTC

I'm glad you like it, Len.

Thank you so much for the feature.

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Vj McMullan May 19, 2012, 12:28am UTC

I like the poem and the car.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:47am UTC

Thank you so much, Vj.

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Richard Lynn Livesay May 19, 2012, 1:09am UTC

excellent and fun terza rima...I'm impressed, Irina

accepted and Featured on Surreal Circus

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:48am UTC

I'm so glad you like it, Richard.

Thank you so much for the feature.

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JOHN BECK May 19, 2012, 6:23am UTC

Fun car and form and poem, Irina.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:49am UTC

I'm so glad you like it, John.

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Cynthia C. May 19, 2012, 7:19am UTC

Thank you for sharing with Sadies Points

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:49am UTC

My pleasure.

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Kathryn Flynn May 19, 2012, 7:59am UTC

Excellent, Irina~

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:50am UTC

Thank you so much, Kathryn.

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Debbie W. May 19, 2012, 9:56am UTC

What an accomplishment! Both the form and the poem!

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:51am UTC

Thank you so much, Debbie.

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Pam Brittain May 19, 2012, 1:33pm UTC

Irina, you are amazing. I not only love this poem, but the love affair you have with your car and what a fantastic view you have. Great combination creation.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:51am UTC

Thank you so much, Pam.

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David W. May 19, 2012, 1:35pm UTC

Conceptually original and then done with a flair.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:52am UTC

I'm so glad tou like it, David.

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A. F. Stewart May 19, 2012, 7:08pm UTC

A great poem.

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:53am UTC

Thank you so much, A.F.

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Doug Westberg May 21, 2012, 12:01am UTC

Darling! Thanks for sharing with Depression and Creativity!

Irina Dimitric May 25, 2012, 7:55am UTC

My little Barina is indeed a darling.

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Alice G. May 28, 2012, 11:09pm UTC

I love it Irina: poem, form and car! I am trying to catch up on gather mail from when I was out of town last week.

Irina Dimitric May 30, 2012, 11:58pm UTC

Thank you so much, Alice. I'm trying to catch up too, but I don't think I ever will.

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Jun 5, 2012, 1:09am UTC

How long have you had a blistering desire to create a poetic form, Irina? It's satisfying, isn't it?

During April's contest, I used three forms that had been created during my create-a-form contest in September, 2011. Those forms were Spiral by Marilyn N., Conversant by Robert B., and P3-57 by Priya.

I can't guarantee another create-a-form contest, but I hope you enter if we ever have another.

Irina Dimitric Jun 8, 2012, 12:56am UTC

To create a poetic form occurred to me while I was writing this poem about my car, and the idea was inspired precisely by the poetic forms created by gather members for your create-a- form contest. I thought, perhaps I could create a new form, too.

As you can see, Susan, the inspiration comes through you, so I am truly humbled my creation has had your seal of approval. Thank you so much for the encouragement :)))

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Jun 8, 2012, 10:21am UTC

:-)

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Mar 1, 2013, 7:09pm UTC

Now appearing at Mindful Poetry.

I wonder if you wouldn't mind tagging this with the name of the form?

Irina Dimitric Mar 1, 2013, 10:04pm UTC

So I go into edit and add Tercetonine to my tags. That is very, very exciting!

Thank you, Susan, for guiding me not only poetically but with technicalities as well.