A warm Day In May : Saturday Writing Essentials...

Common is the folly of falling off the cliff
Crashing not forestalled no longer considers if
Suspension finds wrinkles of stalling, mulling
Serendipity resolves raindrops revolving
Liquidation sale finding here and then sewing

Caution is dancing the two step word of the day
Customizing, molding o kiln this changing clay
Salutations to once, rush around yesterday
Saturated years of vanishing away
Categories like dusty boxes, come what may

Learning the ropes above a moat of crocodiles
Echoing adventures where burdens tip the miles
Winsock, sock hop and moments blowin’ in the wind
Ibid idealized and waiting around the bend
Signs of the times in selecting the condiments

Careful the mantra says through the looking glass
Acrostic warm May weather of flowing repast
Reading from metaphors, doors open and close fast
Realizing strictures be not learned by accident
Over the hill and through the woods, seeing the sights
Like ripples widen, the future’s not ours to see
Like ripples from stones thrown in the waters of life

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JOHN BECK May 7, 2012, 8:20am UTC

It's amazing that Through the Looking Glass continues to be such an influence on our culture. Good one, Bill.

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:29am UTC

Solomon said all is vanity, but the modern interpretation is found through the looking glass: Fantasy.
Thank you.

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Patricia J. May 7, 2012, 8:49am UTC

This is beautiful, Bill. The imagery flows one into the other!!

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:30am UTC

I appreciate your reading.

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CL Mareydt May 7, 2012, 10:29am UTC

The 'first' line in every stanza is ... OUT OF THIS WORLD ... !!!!

☀★¸¸.☆.¸¸ . ✶*¨*. ¸ .✫*¨*.¸¸.✶*¸¸.☆.¸¸ . ☀★☀★¸¸.☆.¸¸ . ✶*¨*.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING AT SURREAL CIRCUS!

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:33am UTC

So, you think I should volunteer for the Mars mission, eh.
Thank you.

CL Mareydt May 8, 2012, 9:44am UTC

... tee hee ... ;)

William Dotani May 9, 2012, 3:35am UTC

So you think I'll need a special tee to play golf on Mars, eh. Of course there are golf courses on Mars because men are from Mars and a Scotsman invented it there before going to Scotland for a overspace retirement.

CL Mareydt May 9, 2012, 9:37am UTC

... how to you crank out these fab comments ??? ... please may I take some lessons from you !!! ...

William Dotani May 11, 2012, 4:41am UTC

Look at possibilities and angles the language presents to you. TY.

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Sandy Moore May 7, 2012, 1:03pm UTC

This is super!

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:33am UTC

Thank you.

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Chris Brockman May 7, 2012, 5:42pm UTC

"Over the hill and through the woods, seeing the sights"

I see Doris Day singing Qu'est Sera Sera.

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:34am UTC

You should, since the spirit of that song is in this.
Thank you.

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Pam Brittain May 7, 2012, 7:00pm UTC

Very visual.

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 12:34am UTC

Part of my aim. Thank you.

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Elsie Duggan May 7, 2012, 7:32pm UTC

Another wonderful poem William, to add to your growing collection. I don't know how you manage to take so many parts of sentences and have it all make sense, a master at work, must be, I hope you doctors visit went well, Take care of yourself, I love you, Elsie

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 1:00am UTC

The East Beast (me) has nothing to do but sit in his sandbox. Dr. Seuss, Lewis Carroll and C S Lewis having a wardrobe malfunction sort of makes my head spin an apogee of words streaming out like using a pen doing a crossword puzzle on the train thinking John Dewey would say the ontology of life is noticing the differences in a comprehensive manner.
Thank you.

Good news is surgery useless.
Bad news is irreversible ACL deterioration.
Will have a month of therapy.

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Donna C. May 7, 2012, 9:54pm UTC

All I can say is WOW!! This is just wonderful, William...........

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 1:02am UTC

I vhanged the last word of the first stanza.
That's very nice of you. Thank you.

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Bernard C. May 8, 2012, 1:17am UTC

Ever decreasing circles reaching far out from its source - lots to think about and ponder over too - nice!

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

William Dotani May 8, 2012, 1:47am UTC

We all become stretched by time. Thank you.

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Len Maxwell May 11, 2012, 6:11pm UTC

Excellently done, William. Everyone has their favorite part but I'm rather partial to the "moat of crocodiles."

Thanks for taking the SatWE challenge.

Len Maxwell May 12, 2012, 12:53pm UTC

Any story that includes "moat" and "crocodiles" has to be featured on Gather Writing Essential.

William Dotani May 12, 2012, 10:46pm UTC

Good prompt makes a fun write. Thank you.

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amy s. May 12, 2012, 12:40pm UTC

awesome poem

William Dotani May 12, 2012, 10:45pm UTC

Thank you.

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