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Ah, the double-dactyl. I didn't know about this form last week. Veronica Hosking used it and submitted the poem to Mindful Poetry. Its main feature is my poetic nemesis.
Several of you have a strong grasp on meter and rhythm in poetry. I don't. I have been able to write complicated meter only by singing the poem as I write it. A rubaiyat would be a good example of a heavily metered form. The song I sang when I wrote my long one is Hernando's Hideaway, Ole!Â
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From The Poet's Companion by Kim Addonizio and Dorianne Laux:Â Every poem has rhythm, but when the rhythm is highly organized into a pattern where the number of syllables is important, as well as whether those syllables are stressed or not then we have meter. (p. 141)
This month we will look closely at meter in poetry. Our Form-of-the-Month requires  two stanzas of four lines each, that is, two quatrains. The first three lines are double-dactyls. The fourth line of the stanza is a dactyl-spondee. The spondee in each quatrain rhyme.
I'm betting I've used words many of you find shocking. Well, if not that then unfamiliar. Don't let the terminology put you off. Be brave! You can learn this along with me. I've heard of these various descriptive words for years and have been intimidated. But over time, I've manned up and am now tackling the subject.
I have known that an iamb is a specific unit of measure used to describe a foot. A foot is how we measure a line of poetry.
Let's take an easy one: One foot, two foot, red foot, blue foot. This line of poetry measures four feet. Each foot is a trochee. That is, it has a stressed and then unstressed syllable.
Imagine clapping your hands to it. You'd clap on the "one" and the "two" and on each of the colors. When you clap, that is the stressed syllable. When your hands rest, but you feel the move to the next stressed syllable, that is the unstressed syllable. In this specific case, it is the word "foot."
Now you know that a trochee is a foot with a stressed and then an unstressed syllable like elbow, hold 'em, Susan.
An iamb is a foot with an unstressed and a stressed syllable like create, jump up, tonight.
And a dactyl is a foot with a stressed, unstressed, unstressed syllable like miracle, honesty, popcorn dish.
And a spondee is a foot with two stressed syllables such as hot pot, cuckcoo, door post.
The last basic rhythm pattern is the anapest with unstressed, unstressed, stressed syllables like intertwine, Galilee, on the sea.
Returning to our Form-of-the-Month, double-dactyl.
The form is whimsical along the lines of a limerick or even Little Willie. To accomplish this light-heartedness, each poem begins with a nonsensical pair of words such as Grumpity Bumpity or Crustable Crestible. The second line is a proper or place name such as Tupelo or Albert Lea. And one more line in this form is a one-word double-dactyl that has never been used in a Double-Dactyl before. (Although how this will be determined, I have not figured out, but it's in the Official Rules.)
Here is my example of double-dactyl:
Hocus-me, Pocus-me
Library Boulevard
This is where I'm at home
No one can stop me!
When you write forms for me
Gobbleygoogley
Let the words flow from you
Messages to see!
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It'll be your challenge this month to write a Double-Dactyl and post it to Mindful Poetry. It's my challenge this month to write a teaching double-dactyl. I've found someone has already written one and it's quite wonderful. I'm aiming to write something like this.
A recap of April's contest will appear soon!
Mindfully,
Susan Budig
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Wriggledy wiggledy
Two year old Kidely
Constantly wiggling
Challenging Mom
Moving incessantly
Incomprehensibly
Parenting failing so
How ‘bout a bomb?
However I do see in examples elsewhere this same scenario. Do you have anything enlightening to say to help us out?
However I do think it's within our grasp to learn and write. And I think the inner-confidence gained through learning something new and challenging will make it worth it. :-)
Meter and comedy
Challenging sanity
For lovely Jax
Stirring ingredients
Counterintuitive
Counting the syllables
There, now relax!
But I could have!
What you wrote above there, John, would have taken me at least two days to compose. :-)
lightly stirring the pot
Susan tests sanity
promptly or not
stirring ingredients
ubergrammatically
counting his syllables
that is John's lot
I am working on it....it'll probably take all month....
Though it's "wrong" I fear
But I don't really keer
Just "writing" is why I'm here ! ;)
Thank you submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists. Now Featured.
to cede control
to the music
that makes you feel like dancing
just wait to feel
the words resonate
with your heartbeat
let them touch you
anywhere they choose
dare not resist
let them lift you
like leaves in the breeze
you write with your mind
more than fine
but when you feel,
your words will reel
in loving flow
your heart will sing
and will amaze
I promise
Hard to tell in email.
I'm not a very good dancer if I'm dancing with a partner. I just have a terrible time following. (we are talking about dancing here!) But I love to do interpretive dance and I can definitely strutt my stuff in that free-verse mode, if you follow what I mean. But either way-with a partner or solo-there is still a patterned rhythm to follow because the music dictates it.
just rambling now...
Yes... I was talking about just dancing, but you can never be truly sure with me, I know! :)
A dactyl is stressed on the first syllable followed by two unstressed, like "wonderful" (WON der ful).
I hope I wrote my column in a way that's somewhat appealing and understandable. And at some point you, too, might come over to the (dark) side. ;-)
Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. I'm second-guessing myself about having offered this form and column and trying to hold my hand from beating myself with it.
John...I apparently do not speak correctly, because I've never gotten that stressed and unstressed syllable thing. I accent incorrect syllables I guess....
But I am trusting that learning this will improve my writing. I have come to this conclusion because some of my most esteemed teachers (John Minczeski, Jude Nutter) write wonderful poetry, win awards, have several books published, teach in Universities, the list goes on.
I want that, Richard. Not all of it, but I do want to be able to claim greater credentials than a Gather group owner who tries to teach some poetry. No offense intended to anyone when I say that, either. But I do want more and I think to get what I want, I need to "copy the master." John and Jude are a couple of masters to me.
And they both know their anapests and trochees inside out. Their scansion skills are impeccable.
Mariel Hemingway's
Grandfather never used
Too many words.
No-one could ever ac-
cuse him of being a
Sesquipedalian,
Or so I've heard.
We are all doing the best we can. And yours can be with your unique flavor.
si if me cyan du i
but it nah go easy
if is Hinglish
But if mi use Patwa
mi nuh haffi badda
worry bout di meta
nar di riddim
Rubidy dubidy
Kingston dance hall music.
That was Passa Passa
Spanish Town Road
Wednesday nights at midnight,
superflasticity
is the dress code that rules
for the ladies
Also, it's interesting that you mention Gullah. I wrote a poem about the Gullah people. It's in my published chapbook of poetry.
But if you post it, probably John or Veronica will read and comment and let you know.
I'm still learning metered poetry.
Can you say insanity?