by Atticus *.
Member since:
September 16, 2006

History in the Making (A Terza Rima for Mindful Poetry)

April 27, 2012 11:26 PM UTC
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Surely they will say that you’re a tool

if you remember things the way I do -

I say the past is altered by the fool.



When even things we died for come untrue,

the pride we hold in us becomes a joke

a generation lost without a clue.



When I hear some in power speak, I choke.

They’d like to change the way we think it was
and make what was what wasn’t - so much smoke!



The inconvenient facts are lost because
it fits a bit more tidy in the mind
with all the messy edges trimmed of fuzz

To search for truth no matter what one finds
is certainly not how it’s done on Fox
A man need only need draw his own timeline -


what doesn’t work stuff in a closet box
along with ex girlfriends and lonely socks.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 




Comments: 16

JustMe ~I'm happy to be~ Apr 27, 2012, 11:32pm UTC
If we write what we want to into our timeline, and stuff away the unpleasant memories, our timeline is but smoke and mirrors. Yet, think about the closet! A treasure trove of writing ideas. :)
Len Maxwell Apr 27, 2012, 11:33pm UTC
Quite a statement and nicely penned. Oh, I really liked the idea of stuffing an ex girlfriend in the closet -- I'll have to remember that trick.

Thanks for posting to the Choking on Power Wall of The Triple Name Club where it's now featured.
Atticus *. Apr 27, 2012, 11:53pm UTC
pardon my formatting. I'll fix it later.
william d. Apr 28, 2012, 12:20am UTC
I enjoy your poetry, Atticus!
Doug Westberg Apr 28, 2012, 12:56am UTC
original and expertly done!
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 28, 2012, 1:18am UTC
Atticus...Atticus...Atticus *. What can we do with a terza rima like that? I once rhymed the word "was" in a limerick. Yeah, there's not a lot one can do with a rhyme like that. ;-D

You still managed some pointed barbs in political fashion.

Terza rima, you’ve locked this one up with grace Mindful Poetry.
Irina Dimitric Apr 28, 2012, 1:20am UTC
I relate to your sentiments...those in power twist the truth to fit their agenda. This is a marvellous protest terza rima. The last to lines are hilarious.
elizabeth evans Apr 28, 2012, 3:25am UTC
Especially here in Oz with Julia, Abbot, Slipper and Swan. And what about Anna Bligh?
Irina Dimitric Apr 28, 2012, 6:26am UTC
Everywhere, Elizabeth.
Bernard C. Apr 28, 2012, 3:50am UTC
Lonely socks huh? This n every other laundry day we're reminded of the good n bad days :-)) Nice write :-))

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
JOHN BECK Apr 28, 2012, 7:35am UTC
This is so much fun, Atticus! I though it was only my generation that used "tool" in that way. In fact an insult was to call somebody a wedge (man's simplest tool).
aniko    Apr 28, 2012, 6:15pm UTC
Interesting--I've heard that use of "tool" a lot in Jamaica, but hardly ever here in the States.
A. F. Stewart Apr 28, 2012, 10:31am UTC
A revealling and skilful poem.
Ann Marcaida Apr 28, 2012, 3:24pm UTC
I love the quote from American Pie that you embedded here. This poem has the same sort of wistful feel.

Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists.
Angela A. Apr 28, 2012, 10:35pm UTC
Lonely socks eh?
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Mustafa Demiri Apr 29, 2012, 8:35pm UTC
It's as if the fresh air of truth would cause some to choke for having grown accustom to the smog... Did you know that they won't keep Bill O'Reilly's book on Lincoln in the Ford's Theatre's museum bookstore?... Obviously he'd grown too accustomed to the way Fox gets hold of its facts, make them up and keep at it 'til most people believe it's true... then you have truth by consensus !

Brilliantly wrought, and, with that roguish bit of humour at the end, a very enjoyable read.

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