by Atticus *.
Member since:
September 16, 2006

Venus in Transit - June 5th, 2012 - (A Haibun for Mindful Poetry)

April 25, 2012 11:17 PM UTC (Updated: April 25, 2012 11:23 PM UTC)
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Venus in transit, the sun is setting. But night on the Texas plains will not cool June. Perhaps she does not care that the window is open; the urgency of the moment cannot be quelled. There is a lamp on the nightstand, but it too must wait. 

Regulus appears
on the horizon, a cat
steps from the shadows


While outside they gather in droves, not knowing why; except they are drawn to this place - where light pools in circles on the pavement. They rise in stridulant dance, songs to hasten the fall of night.







 

 

 

 

Whetstone: Part fantasy, part astronomy, part direct observation, part wishful thinking.

Comments: 15

JOHN BECK Apr 25, 2012, 11:23pm UTC
Yes, if we miss it this year, nobody alive today will see a transit of Venus.
Well done, Atticus.
Atticus *. Apr 25, 2012, 11:26pm UTC
Thanks John, I knew you would know about the foundation for this poem. :-)
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 25, 2012, 11:37pm UTC
I have been hollering to my family for weeks, "Come look! It's Venus in the sky!" For a while, it was mirroring Jupiter, I believe.

Now it's so bright, it's like a blue-blood's diamond earring up there on the ear of the moon.
JOHN BECK Apr 26, 2012, 7:24am UTC
It is!
Atticus *. Apr 25, 2012, 11:25pm UTC
Edited only for type size, I didn't change anything else.

It was too small to read! Don't know why that happened.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 25, 2012, 11:38pm UTC
At least you got it in on time. I don't think I'm going to. I still have to write up tomorrow's challenge! I know what it's going to be, but haven't found the links, et al.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 25, 2012, 11:39pm UTC
I am intrigued and curious and the owner of some new words that I didn't know before.

This is poetry sowing its wild oats and now appearing at Mindful Poetry.
libramoon .. Apr 26, 2012, 12:30am UTC
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stephen berwaldt Apr 26, 2012, 1:06am UTC
This is quite beautiful, Atticus. The phrases are so smooth in their transition from one sentence to the next. Very nice.

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Bernard C. Apr 26, 2012, 5:23am UTC
They say that always in the month of June something special happens - this reminds me of that - maybe fantasy - maybe not :-)

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Andrea Grenadier Apr 26, 2012, 9:15am UTC
Atticus, I love how you captured the restless beauty of a night, wrapping all of these elements in something mystical. I had to look up the word "stridulant", but I know the sound well! Thanks for being such a good teacher. : )
A. F. Stewart Apr 26, 2012, 9:59am UTC
A celestial wonder.
Angela A. Apr 26, 2012, 2:32pm UTC
Wow, that was great!
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Mustafa Demiri Apr 26, 2012, 3:07pm UTC
A celestial piece.
elizabeth evans Apr 26, 2012, 8:40pm UTC
This Spring has certainly provided a nighttime show for all stargazers. Venus, Mercury and the moon all in spectacular conjunction. Am looking forward to June when Venus will appear to cross in front of the sun...

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