by Doug Westberg
Member since:
January 4, 2007

Prayer: Haibun for Mindful Poetry Contest #18 MP2012

April 25, 2012 06:14 PM UTC
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Venus and Jupiter, Betelgeuse and Sirius, she can look up and see you just as I can, just as we did the night I brought my laptop with the star finder and we lay on our backs on the grass airstrip and watched the shooting stars.  Look in on her, please, give her a little starshine, a sense of wonder, maybe she’ll remember.  She was such a frail, tiny, pretty slip of an angel.  You were there then, too.  Now she’s grown-up and severe and she doesn’t speak to me.  Remember me to her.  And remember her then, for me, when I forget.

 

sparkling diamonds in
coal-black sky: raindrops on a
cosmic spider web

prompt here

 

 

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Comments: 28

Pam Brittain Apr 25, 2012, 6:24pm UTC
Awesome.
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:38pm UTC
Thanks, Pam!
Debbie W. Apr 25, 2012, 6:27pm UTC
Really lovely. I lay there on my back and saw the stars, too, twinkling, bobbing, winking...
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:38pm UTC
Thanks, Debbie!
A. F. Stewart Apr 25, 2012, 6:43pm UTC
A little sad but still beautiful.
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:38pm UTC
Thanks, anita!
JOHN BECK Apr 25, 2012, 6:44pm UTC
Nicely visual. "raindrops on a
cosmic spider web" I like the metaphor.
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:39pm UTC
Thanks, John!
Angie O. Apr 25, 2012, 7:21pm UTC
Hauntingly beautiful. The words just flow.
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:39pm UTC
Thanks, Angie!
J. Reid Apr 25, 2012, 8:44pm UTC
Smiles...

Thank you for submitting to: Not Gathering Dust!
Doug Westberg Apr 25, 2012, 10:39pm UTC
Thanks, Johnice!
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 25, 2012, 11:11pm UTC
Exactly. Thank you. I'm working on mine and it's not going well. Glad yours did!

This is poetry sowing its wild oats and now appearing at Mindful Poetry.
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 12:59am UTC
thanks, Susan!
Alison H. Apr 26, 2012, 12:06am UTC
There is something comforting about remembering that our loved (and lost) ones see the same moon, stars and sun. A beautiful write.
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 12:53am UTC
thanks, Alison! I cried when I wrote this.
Alison H. Apr 26, 2012, 12:56am UTC
Ohhhhhh!
libramoon .. Apr 26, 2012, 12:41am UTC
What poem are you carrying in your pocket today?
http://www.gather.com/viewArticle.action?articleId=281474981289812
stephen berwaldt Apr 26, 2012, 1:30am UTC
This was really nice, doug, and so exceptionally poignant...

Thank you submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists.
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 1:34pm UTC
Thank you, Stephen.
Katryn D. Apr 26, 2012, 9:54am UTC
I do enjoy the night sky
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 1:36pm UTC
Me too! Did you see the conjunction of Venus and Jupiter this month?
Katryn D. Apr 26, 2012, 1:46pm UTC
yes we did...almost forgot to look though...things have been hectic here, luckily I get e-mails about sky happenings :)
ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Apr 26, 2012, 10:15am UTC
I like to think our angels see the same moon, stars and sky as we do Doug. I draw comfort in that idea. Well written as always.

Thank you for sharing with The Surreal Circus.
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 1:36pm UTC
Thanks, Carol.
Mustafa Demiri Apr 26, 2012, 2:51pm UTC
Heartrendingly beautiful.
Doug Westberg Apr 26, 2012, 3:06pm UTC
Thanks, Mustafa!
Sandy Moore Apr 26, 2012, 10:40pm UTC
This brings back many memories of sharing the moon and stars with someone special.

Thank you for sharing with Watching The Wind Blow By

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