by Susan Budig - Mindful Poet
Member since:
February 16, 2006

A Slice of Life from Hankhorne Dan (trimerics for the masses)

April 18, 2012 05:24 PM UTC
views: 0 | 15 people recommend this | comments: 27

Swiped a dollar from my brother
Bought a box of Cracklejack, left me fifty cents
Dropped two quarters in the jute box
Now I’m broke and sitting on a fence

Bought a box of Cracklejack, left me fifty cents
Half-a-dollar, half-a-dollar, ain’t enough
for the fuguepie on the counter

Dropped two quarters in the jute box
Swaying back and fro with my honeybunch
No one’s looking, snuck a kiss

Now I’m broke and sitting on a fence
Scuffing my shoes against the brick wall
Thinking of that kiss, what a chewsy one it was!

Comments: 27

JOHN BECK Apr 18, 2012, 5:26pm UTC
Those words felt like they belonged there, Coach. Great trimeric.
Priya P. Apr 19, 2012, 12:50am UTC
I agree 100%. This was my fav of them all.

Featured with grace in the Triple Name Club.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 19, 2012, 12:57am UTC
Priya, I'm supposed to be in bed! But quickly, did you know/see how we all did your P3-57 yesterday (Tuesday)? Go look!

And thanks for your support on my poem here, but it truly is no match for many others submitted today. I am agog with the quality of poetry submitted.

Back to beddie for me.
Otelia S. Apr 18, 2012, 5:29pm UTC
Sounds good to me. Now I'm sending you a dollar so your brother can keep his and you can sneak another crackeljack kiss. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 18, 2012, 10:35pm UTC
Thanks for the buck, Otelia! And I could go for another chewsy kiss.
Connie C. Apr 18, 2012, 5:36pm UTC
Susan,

I enjoyed reading this. I remember when I was in school and cracker jacks was the "in" thing to eat. The prize in the package was always fun. Wow that was a long time ago.
Granny Janny Apr 18, 2012, 7:00pm UTC
Connie...you don't look that old!
Susan...no fair...your poem can't be beat cuz the words word made especially for this fantastic poem.
Granny Janny Apr 18, 2012, 7:00pm UTC
I mean...words were made....
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 18, 2012, 8:05pm UTC
Thanks for the read and comment, Connie. Yes, Cracklejack was inspired by Cracker Jack popcorn. It was such fun to find those prizes even though the prizes weren't all that, ya know? My how times have changed.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 18, 2012, 8:07pm UTC
Jan, have you been reading these trimerics? Hoppin' Toledo! They are amazing! Mine has got nothing on them.

Plus, I came up with the words last week and spontaneously last night included them in the prompt. I hadn't been thinking of them all that time. :-) Trust me, this contest is keeping me soooo busy, thinking is about the last thing I do.
Been a while since I had crackerjacks...
A. F. Stewart Apr 18, 2012, 7:16pm UTC
A most cool poem.
Virginia M. Apr 18, 2012, 9:24pm UTC
I remember the rings, 'tattoos' and other things in crackerjacks. Ahhh, back in da day! :)

What neck of tha woods are you from? I just wondered if fuguepies were similar to moonpies. Surely you remember those, as well as the crackerjacks?
Does anyone know if they're still made and/or the price nowadays?

I love your poem, Susan!
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 18, 2012, 10:37pm UTC
Moonpies are for those Southerners. I'm a Northerner from Minnesota.

Fuguepie was inspired by fudgepie. I don't know ~where~ that came from.
Kerry Dexter Apr 19, 2012, 9:37am UTC
Virignia,
yes, they still make Moon Pies. the original company makes them, and there are some by other companies like a kind with oatmeal cookies, too. haven't had one in a loong while so not up on current pricing, but now you have me thinking...
elizabeth evans Apr 18, 2012, 9:29pm UTC
Definitely a winner. I used to love those Crackerjacks!
Atticus *. Apr 18, 2012, 9:43pm UTC
I love the voice of this poem Susan. I totally agree that the "silly" words fit so beautifully into the dialect, or vernacular for that matter. It was a delight to read.
Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 18, 2012, 10:38pm UTC
Thank you! I'm eager to go listen to you read yours, but must wait until after I've picked poem-of-the-day so that I don't bias myself.
Doug Westberg Apr 19, 2012, 2:03am UTC
I was going to say that!! Thanks for sharing with Depression and Creativity! I picture something out of Our Gang or Twain.
Irina Dimitric Apr 18, 2012, 10:44pm UTC
Oh, very nice...especially the chewsy kiss with your honeybunch.
Terry M. Apr 18, 2012, 11:19pm UTC
Great job! Reminded me of that Alan Jackson song.
stephen berwaldt Apr 18, 2012, 11:45pm UTC
I love those "chewsy" kisses... You can still get a lot for a dollar.
You done good here...but you'd better...it's your prompt!

Thank you submitting to Gathers Luminous Writers and Artists.
Mustafa Demiri Apr 19, 2012, 12:57am UTC
I enjoyed this tale of this naughty child thief and all the memories she bought with that stolen dollar.
Bernard C. Apr 19, 2012, 3:31am UTC
Enjoyed the imagery - stealing kisses, stealing money..you are a thief! a thief of hearts as well :-)))

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
Angie O. Apr 19, 2012, 7:50am UTC
This has the feel of our hometown. I especially like the last line.
Kerry Dexter Apr 19, 2012, 9:42am UTC
I like the voice of this poem, too, Susuan, a whole story well told in just a few lines
but I have a question --jute box? is that another jabberwocky or what you call it up north? juke box it what I'd say instead.
Katryn D. Apr 19, 2012, 7:34pm UTC
that dollar went further than it could these days ;)

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