Hurt

You hurt,

I hurt too

Your tears i shed

Your pain

I have bled

The truth is

Hard to Swallow

You feel it was me

That let you down

That let you sink

That watched you drown

But it was not me

That betrayed your trust

You betrayed yourself

And now you must

Accept that, in pain

The truth is

Hard to swallow

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Kathryn Flynn Apr 17, 2012, 2:44pm UTC

oh oh..........

Priya P. Apr 17, 2012, 2:54pm UTC

sad huh? my poor brother....

Kathryn Flynn Apr 17, 2012, 3:13pm UTC

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KittyKutabare aka Candy Pole Apr 17, 2012, 2:57pm UTC

fantastic cadence becomes a part of the lament~ tonal pulse blends beautifully with the subject matter~

Thanks for sharing in the Triple Name Club.

Priya P. Apr 17, 2012, 10:31pm UTC

thank you so much Kitty - and congrats of being our new Tuesday moderator :)

Doug Westberg Apr 17, 2012, 11:40pm UTC

What Kitty said, better than I could have. Thanks for sharing with Depression and Creativity!
Now featured.

wendy st. john-devereaux Apr 18, 2012, 5:51am UTC

i agree---kitty said this very well.....

blessings

Priya P. Apr 24, 2012, 4:07pm UTC

thank you so much for featuring this special one for me Doug.

thanks wendy :)

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Gloria G Apr 17, 2012, 3:02pm UTC

Very nice!!!

Priya P. Apr 17, 2012, 10:31pm UTC

thanks gloria

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Richard Lynn Livesay Apr 17, 2012, 3:51pm UTC

sometimes we just can't help someone...it's sad to watch someone self-destruct
nice flowing poetry with a message

wendy st. john-devereaux Apr 18, 2012, 5:52am UTC

rrl says it better than i could

blessings

Priya P. Apr 24, 2012, 4:08pm UTC

very true Richard, it's a horrible feeling... helplessness

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CL Mareydt Apr 17, 2012, 5:19pm UTC

A rich poem of 'what goes around comes around' ...

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:06pm UTC

I definately believe in karma....

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Lori J Schiele Apr 17, 2012, 5:30pm UTC

You can definitely tell that this is from the heart. Well written.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:07pm UTC

thank you so much lori, yes it really was

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JOHN BECK Apr 17, 2012, 7:34pm UTC

Poetic justice expressed poetically.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:07pm UTC

I'm getting the hang of this poetry thing .. :)

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Apr 17, 2012, 7:58pm UTC

Yep, the bitter truth can be very hard to swallow. Nicely penned!

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:07pm UTC

thanks dear friend

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Cynthia C. Apr 17, 2012, 9:08pm UTC

Thank you so much for sharing with Sadies Points

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:07pm UTC

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David W. Apr 17, 2012, 11:06pm UTC

Lyrical and sad.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:08pm UTC

it is, the truth sometimes is so very sad. but luckily my truth has a lot of happiness as well

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Ann Marcaida Apr 19, 2012, 1:25pm UTC

This would make a pretty good plot line for a Jane Austen novel. Thanks for sharing with Gather's Luminous Writers and Artists.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:08pm UTC

if only I could write that well, or novels :)

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simran kaur Apr 22, 2012, 9:36am UTC

Hi Priya Dear! :)

Really sometimes truth becomes hard to accept and eventually we don't accept our mistakes..

A beautiful take :)
Keep writing ..

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:10pm UTC

hi my little thitilia, how are you? yes, reality is a hard truth. He will learn soon that the only way to make it to the top is to accept responsibility for his actions, start and the bottom, and work your way up. the same way the rest of us in the world live.

I hope you have been writing. today I have time to catch up. I'll look for your posts. hope you are well. my new nickname for you, thitilia (butterfly)

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Barbary Chaapel Apr 22, 2012, 4:44pm UTC

Priya, the cadence is well thought out. And bound to come into play if reading to another, a lesson. I can well imagine chagrin.

Kudos to you.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:11pm UTC

thank you, im debating on sending him this poem. maybe ....

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ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Apr 24, 2012, 4:29pm UTC

All you can do is all you can do Priya.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:12pm UTC

Yes I am learning this, and helping my parents to see this as well. my younger brother is self distructing, and it hurts to sit on the sideline and watch. I've done all I can do, now it's time he helps himself.

ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Apr 27, 2012, 12:21pm UTC

Unfortunately I can relate to you on this level as well. Another common bond we share. It is like your hands are tied behind your back. I hope he does the right thing soon.

Priya P. Apr 27, 2012, 12:34pm UTC

everything happens in good time. when it's his time, it will happen. I hope it's soon too. he is newly married and she is tiring fast....

ʚϊɞ Carol ʚϊɞ Apr 27, 2012, 1:30pm UTC

Sending good wishes your way for your brother Priya.

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Irina Dimitric Apr 27, 2012, 6:50pm UTC

All you can do, Priya, is assure your brother you love him, but you don't accept his behaviour. A poem from the heart... Blessings.

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