dovetailer ~ Senryu ~ MP2012

dovetailer

love imbues my words

such power to titillate

as if suckling lips

such passion lent

to wanton words that free us

from our drudgery

from angelic souls

rise to desire and dream

those vixens we love

not the chill outdoors

but the passion deep inside

that makes bodies burn

Follow these rules:

Follow the syllable count
Follow the subject theme
You have freedom to make line breaks as you choose or none at all.
Today's prompt: although Japanese poetry like haiku and senyru are not usually titled, we will title ours. For your title: Use a name of someone on Gather. If you are hesitant to do that, use your own name as it appears on Gather.
Publish so that the date stamped is April 10th and only stamped once unless you provide a clarifying comment.
Tag with MP2012
Publish to Mindful Poetry (and other groups as you wish)

Comments: 39

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 12:19am UTC

After you read my senryu, Stephen, you'll see how nicely you "proved my point." :-)

thanks for this!

Senryu poetry like this definitely appears at Mindful Poetry.

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 12:23am UTC

I did read your senryu...I was honored. Had the feeling I didn't want to disappoint... :)
you are right...I could write this stuff all day and all night long...

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Apr 11, 2012, 3:03am UTC

And you would do it expertly, Stephen.

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 2:51pm UTC

A weighty comment from one who does all he does expertly...

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Mustafa Demiri Apr 11, 2012, 12:29am UTC

You are truly the consummate and amourous bard of Gather. Well done.

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 2:54pm UTC

Just two or three steps this side of being a "one-trick pony". You know how it is...some topics are easier to write than others. This is my fallback when I can't think of anything else to write, which seems to be often... :)

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Janet "Jax" B. Apr 11, 2012, 1:05am UTC

Wow!

Janet "Jax" B. Apr 11, 2012, 1:06am UTC

I kept thinking...whoa, it's steamy.

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 2:55pm UTC

You had me at "WOW"!

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 3:13pm UTC

There's never enough steam...is there?

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Granny Janny Apr 11, 2012, 1:08am UTC

Though not every stanza proves the test
Your compilation shows the rest
How the senryu form can elevate
Sensuality in our sight
We all seek love and when pressed
Want to do what is right

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 3:12pm UTC

How noble, wanting to
"do what is right"
can seem
It's the doing
that is often an arduous uphill climb,
but well worth it,
should you persevere, I hear.
The view is spectacular from the top
I'm told by one
with a heart of gold.

Thanks, Jan.

Granny Janny Apr 11, 2012, 3:18pm UTC

Giggling a bit here. The comment flowed last night up until the last line. And I just had to write something and move on. In the light of day I might change it to "embrace the fires of the night"

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 3:50pm UTC

I have not forgotten.

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Priya P. Apr 11, 2012, 2:23am UTC

Lovely expanded senyru. So much Passion

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 3:05pm UTC

I thought I'd try the passion thing for a change...
"don those training wheels...give it a go," said I
so I wibbled and wobbled...it seemed so strange
'til I got up to speed and then started to fly...

Thanks for your comment, Priya...

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Bernard C. Apr 11, 2012, 5:13am UTC

An interesting looking piece - I won't ask to expand on it as vixens says enough LOL

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 3:14pm UTC

such expansion is not for the faint of heart, Bernard. Thank you for your comment...again...

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JOHN BECK Apr 11, 2012, 8:58am UTC

Definitely Stephen, although I don't quite get the line, "as if suckling lips".

stephen berwaldt Apr 11, 2012, 9:09am UTC

Thank you, John... check out the picture..it's worth a thousand words... :)
I initially used the word "fingertips" but thought the recent rendition more visceral

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