by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Timeless Changes : Saturday Writing Essentials: Open Doors: Changes

April 04, 2012 04:12 AM UTC
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Associative affects related
Bridging patterned painting retrospect
Casually reflected in the mirror
Delay erasure of permanent link
Enduring possibilities to tend
Finding whatever forever asking

Breathe deep, shallow, spreading out tomorrow
Planned by yesterday, replays filtered grays
Bye is why the clock ticks other spaces
Can, could, would, should fading winds embrace
Song of processional times blown away
Acceptance of changed path disarming

Considering if according too soon
Maybe could would actively bending tense
As comma tells a colon things have changed
But, yet compound words dashing into and
Catching jigsaw puzzle pieces drifting
On templates memorializing truth

Deception defends each magic dragon
Each stage goodbye steps into a new light
Care of this, that kept in attic boxes
Inside dusty daydream meditation
Dancing with timeless audience member
Every good boy does fine and changes


 

Comments: 24

Bernard C. Apr 4, 2012, 6:11am UTC
An unusual reading poem - not sure what to make of it - at first thought it was encoded as in abc method though then it changes to..and its as if am reading something that had crash landed or came down from the sky as in a UFO of something like that. Is it me or does it make sense that am not making head or tail of it? LOL The last stanza makes me believe in boyhood orchildhood and to those times that are long gone..though clearly not forgotten. Were you abducted?

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:34am UTC
The prompt concerns change, so each line has change. I use both time and attitude to denote change. Change has both physical properties now dust and mental activity values put into context fitting the moment. The ABC's give way to change and for it all we must decide and choose a path knowing unconsciously nothing really lasts. Change is unrelenting. We find truth remembered and forgotten in our perception of had been. Thank you.
JOHN BECK Apr 4, 2012, 9:26am UTC
Starting as an abecedarian, this poem moves on with sounds and meaning in your inimitable style. Well done, Bill.
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:35am UTC
The ABC's give way to change and for it all we must decide and choose a path knowing unconsciously nothing really lasts. Change is unrelenting. We find truth remembered and forgotten in our perception of had been. Thank you.
Patricia J. Apr 4, 2012, 11:39am UTC
You fooled me with this one, Bill. I thought you were going one place and you went to a completely different ending. I like it, it speaks to me!
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:36am UTC
We are all on the never stopping merry-go-round.
Thank you.
Peter Joseph Swanson Apr 4, 2012, 4:30pm UTC
A marvelous journey!
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:36am UTC
Thank you.
Pam Brittain Apr 4, 2012, 4:44pm UTC
I love that last line.
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:37am UTC
Should be true. Thank you.
Sheila Deeth Apr 4, 2012, 4:46pm UTC
Can, could, would, should decide I like it, even if I don't know where it's going. Can could would should be writing but I'm gathering for a break and glad to drop by.
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:36am UTC
The ABC's give way to change and for it all we must decide and choose a path knowing unconsciously nothing really lasts. Change is unrelenting. We find truth remembered and forgotten in our perception of had been. Thank you.
Chris Brockman Apr 4, 2012, 5:15pm UTC
Magic dragons may be dust in the wind, but as long as we keep asking questions fortunately there will be some changes made.
William Dotani Apr 5, 2012, 2:41am UTC
Our memories retain and change in our perception based on present reality.
Yes, there will be. Thank you.
Len Maxwell Apr 6, 2012, 7:53pm UTC
An excellent poem dealing with changes in many different ways. I have to ask about that last line though. Were you aiming at "scale" as a change, or just referencing music to include one more change in your poem?

Thanks for taking the SatWE challenge.
William Dotani Apr 7, 2012, 3:06am UTC
Actually, I just was grabbing attention with a well known phrase. Basically, I'm telling all males to not worry about how life has given unexpected changes.
Because of Dr. Ellis & Learning Psychology hot as you can stand it spa learning, I think outside the box of what should be expected. I appreciate your comment. Thank you.
Len Maxwell Apr 7, 2012, 6:21pm UTC
Thanks for the explanation. Saturday gives me the chance to come back and feature work such as this on Gather Writing Essential.
William Dotani Apr 8, 2012, 5:24am UTC
Is there any chance I'll be asked to put my handprint in cement outside a Chinese restaurant in Toledo? TY.
Len Maxwell Apr 8, 2012, 10:56am UTC
Nope, that gig is already booked. I can get your buttprint in a pile of cow manure in Kansas though.
William Dotani Apr 9, 2012, 3:51am UTC
I can get a free Depends, so I'm game. LOL.
Elsie Duggan Apr 6, 2012, 11:57pm UTC
A very interesting poem, I haven't read the prompt, but if it has to do with change, then you aced it, and the chapters that follow are wonderful, love, Elsie
William Dotani Apr 7, 2012, 3:08am UTC
I think I went way too subtle and way too deep in metaphor for this poem to have any relevance. However, I thank thee.
Ms Lee P. Apr 7, 2012, 12:14pm UTC
Interesting poem. Change always happens and has happened since time began. Everything changes, even the bugs, even the animals, even the air we breathe, we humans definitely change. It can't be stopped.
William Dotani Apr 8, 2012, 5:29am UTC
Last night I told my wife I would eventually fully digest my beans and onions lunch. It was a nice day. I opened the windows and put Aqua Velva on. My wife couldn't resist in asking me to take a bath.

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