Mindful Poetry Contest: April 11, 2012

We are jumping from short poems to mid-sized poems with today's challenge: rondel prime.

If you are new to this group or contest, go here to learn more and then come back to participate in today's challenge.

Follow these rules:

Follow the form as described in the link above
Today's prompt: choose one of these vices and make that both your title and theme
Publish so that the date stamped is April 11th with only one stamp-time unless you clarify in the comment section how you edited it
Tag with MP2012
Publish to Mindful Poetry (and other groups as you wish)

Read today's submissions by others and comment. Here's the link.

Yesterday we received 25 senryu submissions to the Mindful Poetry Contest. Here is the Poem-of-the-Day. Also, please note that I've been misspelling this form frequently. It's s-e-n...r-y (think rye bread)...u. senryu

Good luck! Have fun! Read and comment on other contestants here.

Comments: 20

Granny Janny Apr 11, 2012, 12:37am UTC

Pulling up my sleeves. Big sigh. This is not so easy...

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 12:46am UTC

Still, it's not too bad. It's 14 lines like a sonnet, but some repeat so that you only need 10 original lines.

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 12:57am UTC

A question was asked that I clarify the requirements. That comment has disappeared, but here's some more help on the rondel prime:

Here are the guidelines:

In English, it is syllabic, often falling into iambic meter with all lines of similar length

Four stanzas total, first three stanzas have four lines, last stanza is a couplet

Line 1 repeats at line 7 & 13
Line 2 repeats at 8 & 14
Rhyme scheme: A-B-b-a // a-b-A-B // a-b-b-a // A-B

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 1:00am UTC

For the contest, because this is a friendly contest, you needn't be concerned if you follow iambic meter.

What's important is that you have the correct number of lines (14) and the rhyme scheme as noted above. Also, that you repeat lines 1 & 2 in the correct spots as noted above.

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Janet "Jax" B. Apr 11, 2012, 1:01am UTC

Oh boy....this is going to be a little difficult....

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 1:03am UTC

Give it a try. :-)

Remember that Mondays and Tuesdays are easier and then it gets more poetry-like.

JOHN BECK Apr 11, 2012, 6:45am UTC

Jax, I think you'll be surprised at how it comes together. Have fun with it!

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Doug Westberg Apr 11, 2012, 1:03am UTC

Is the ABba abAB abbaAB hard and fast? This should be clear. I googled Rondel Prime and found some variance...

Doug Westberg Apr 11, 2012, 1:04am UTC

so that's a yes?...

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet Apr 11, 2012, 1:13am UTC

For this poetry contest on Gather, it's best to use the links I give in the challenge. I know that's not what you would normally do as a writer, Doug, but for us, it's best.

So yes, the rhyme scheme is: A-B-b-a // a-b-A-B // a-b-b-a // A-B