A Damaged Toy

Twas the subject of never and always
In ordinary vocabulary
Meandering in meadows of each vibe
Entranced, where the fountain of hope first met
Looking beyond stone tossed ripples

Yes, life sculpted watercolors faded
Etching, eroding into restoring
Xylophone notes that somehow remember
Instantly, so mystically fiction
Typing finds the nighttime vibrant

Interrogatives filling the spaces
Nib, ‘be ye long’ to write down escapade
Sibling of once corsage of repeating
Inside each loop, yet not if it early
Developing rhetorical patterns
Endings touching inner longings

ABC perhaps never looking back
Sighing melodies color emptiness
Kneading dough in mixture of forgotten
I becoming the narrative once sailed
Next coming with compliments of the Chef
Guessing whatever way it went

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Bernard C. Mar 31, 2012, 5:00am UTC

Each part making up the whole - an interesting workout - being demolished over time or self-destruct I wonder - whatever it was, is and remains a mystery toy encoded time piece :-)

Thanks for sharing and submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

William Dotani Mar 31, 2012, 5:17am UTC

We forever are painting the changing are. (Neat comment).
Thank you.

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JOHN BECK Mar 31, 2012, 8:30am UTC

Timely Exit Inside Asking. Interesting acrostic. Life experiences reflected in our writing.

William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:25am UTC

Spot on.
The acrostic concerns my disgust with trying to get on Gather.
Thank you.

Barbary C. Apr 4, 2012, 2:50pm UTC

I'm with you on this. Last week Gather was doing strange things when I tried to post.

Nice work, Bill.

William Dotani Apr 7, 2012, 2:03am UTC

Well said. I don't even try anymore to get on Gather before Midnight.

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Patricia J. Mar 31, 2012, 8:37am UTC

As life continues so do the colors!

William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:26am UTC

Yes and changing hues.
Thank you.

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Peter Joseph Swanson Mar 31, 2012, 10:39am UTC

On and on and on in new loops, new spaces filled, to those longings ...

William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:27am UTC

Hope marches on to any dreamer.
Thank you.

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David W. Mar 31, 2012, 1:46pm UTC

Kneading dough in mixture of forgotten
I becoming the narrative once sailed
Next coming with compliments of the Chef
Guessing whatever way it went

My favorite passage. It left me with unanswered questions and, "guessing whatever way it went."

William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:29am UTC

A lot of our life from past to present in the action of unknown possibility.
Thank you.

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Richard Lynn Livesay Mar 31, 2012, 6:25pm UTC

'Entranced where the fountain of hope first met
Looking beyond stone tossed ripples...Guessing whatever way it went"
A metaphysical smorgasborg leaving the reader guessing...Great write William

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William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:30am UTC

I appreciate your comments and the feature.
Thank you.

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Tracy Fabre Apr 1, 2012, 3:15pm UTC

Another feast of wordplay....

William Dotani Apr 2, 2012, 1:30am UTC

We eat of life that of perceptions.
Thank you.

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Sheila Deeth Apr 4, 2012, 4:47pm UTC

Kneading the dough of my dreams and enjoying your words.

William Dotani Apr 7, 2012, 2:04am UTC

You can take 5 and take a bake. Thank you.

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Elsie Duggan Apr 7, 2012, 12:22am UTC

I just love this William, can I say again, another of your best, as I think each one is , I am way behind reading mail as you can see, have 10,039 to read, Of course I have to delete all the advertisements, still takes time, love you, goodnight, Elsie

William Dotani Apr 7, 2012, 2:11am UTC

I don't care anymore about Gather. They erase so many comments and make it almost impossible to get on some friend sites/pages. I now just write and post stories after midnight and respond to whom I can. When or if Gather gets its act together, I will be more active. Go at your own pace and just sign off when Gather goes into turtle mode.
Glad you like this. Sweet dreams. Goodnight.

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