by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

Question Paths of Goodbye : WWE: Question theme

January 09, 2012 03:33 AM UTC
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Sequestered in my Cognac
Until early morning haze
Switched on world awakening
Nightly writing yawn relays
Time within time cinematic showing
Enchanted hibernation

Sculpturing each mist I find
Climbing the stairs that chatter
Tailored air like warming breeze
Revisiting with a smile
Crayon drawings travel miles
Time becomes conscious layers

Mystery of afternoon
Cobwebs fade and say adieu
Simplicity visiting
A little slower today
Reflections dip to retool
Slipping further on liquid horizon

Remembered speaks of goodbye
Sincere brings tears to an eye
Pavement cracks as steps fall in
Against building stiffer winds
Wear and tear like daily rent
Pay the toll beyond the bend

Segregating the why question supply
When partial bits of clay fail to apply
Endings without rhyme but having reason
Empyrean faith in meditation
Pondering nearing whistle of a train
Sounds reflecting, a calling, going home


 

Comments: 64

JOHN BECK Jan 9, 2012, 8:36am UTC
As we face our destination, why becomes unimportant. Excellent poetry, Bill.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:04am UTC
Indeed.
Thank you.
Such can be this journey we call life.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:05am UTC
What a matrix, eh.
Thank you.
Indeed so.
William Dotani Jan 11, 2012, 2:47am UTC
I hope you study the New Foundland language before you venture into Canada again. Although some claim it English, there are some who think their speech related to the Basque, with a seasoning of the French language. Language colors, tones and gives tones to our journey.
Language most certainly does all of that, Bill. Even sign language, which I'd have to try and use rather than study the Newfoundland tongue.
William Dotani Jan 12, 2012, 1:48am UTC
I do love Canadian culture. Canadian TV comedy is really excellent.
I know next to nothing about Canadian culture, and nothing at all about its TV comedy. It doesn't get to Oz.
William Dotani Jan 13, 2012, 4:19am UTC
I would be rather surprised you could not get Canadian TV in your area.
I live 7 miles from Canada and have basically admired their culture most of my life. The culture is of a people accepting and embracing differences without arrogance. I also admire that their government actually cares about the people more than special interests.
Well, Canadian TV is an hemisphere too far away when in Perth. It's probably available here in Carver - but we simply don't watch television when in the States. There are far too many commercials and when it comes to the so-called news, there are far too many talking heads giving their spin.

What you say about Canada can also be said about Australia.
William Dotani Jan 13, 2012, 11:56pm UTC
Yes, the Aussies seem very polite when playing football.
I agree about the commercials. I like both British and Canadian TV shows and scones, which is a far better tasting food than grits. Outside of Dame Etheredge (sp?) and a spot I saw of Rodney Rude, I've no idea about what is good TV in OZ.
The new Dr. Who is quite a departure from the previous in scene shots, scene transition and the props (super fancy).
Aussie Rules Footy, as distinct from soccer and rugby (League and Union), is usually anything but polite and can be quite brutal. Buttered scones, with fresh cream and say strawberry jam, taste best when still piping hot - in my humble opinion. As to television programmes, usually anything produced by the Australian Broadcasting Corporation is of high quality. I haven't seen a Dr Who programme during my current stay in America so am out of touch.
William Dotani Jan 15, 2012, 2:17am UTC
and exactly how long are the Vegemite adverts?
The length of a piece of Vegemite-coated string!
William Dotani Jan 16, 2012, 4:46am UTC
I can imagine, but what would such be used for on TV?
As an antenna.
William Dotani Jan 17, 2012, 2:07am UTC
I did not realize Vegemite had practical non-culinary use.
It can be used for anything, including mending the tar in roads.
William Dotani Jan 18, 2012, 2:09am UTC
I guess stopping for a roadside snack takes on a different meaning with roads patched with vegemite.
Yep, you can lick the roads for an instant hit of energy.
Peter Joseph Swanson Jan 9, 2012, 9:40am UTC
Wonderful!
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:05am UTC
Thank you.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:05am UTC
Thank you.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:05am UTC
Thank you.
elizabeth evans Jan 9, 2012, 1:21pm UTC
Stream of consciousness at its best.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:06am UTC
From a ill body came the rhyme.
Thank you.
Sandy Moore Jan 9, 2012, 2:02pm UTC
Great!
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:07am UTC
Thank you.
Sandy Moore Jan 15, 2012, 12:48am UTC
You are welcome, William.
William Dotani Jan 15, 2012, 2:55am UTC
Arigato.
Pam Brittain Jan 9, 2012, 2:10pm UTC
Awesome.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:07am UTC
Thank you.
Connie C. Jan 9, 2012, 8:03pm UTC
You sure have a talent with words and using them in just the right ways and places. You are so much more advanced at writing then I. I truly enjoyed this.
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:08am UTC
We all have our unique standards of quality. I do not compare because I believe in uniqueness. I do appreciate your kind meaning.
Thank you.
David W. Jan 9, 2012, 8:43pm UTC
A fast trip trough a slow life. Your words are my thoughts. Bravo!
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:09am UTC
That's rather nice of you to say. Sort of like Hotel California, eh.
Thank you.
Donna C. Jan 9, 2012, 9:42pm UTC
Wonderful!!
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:10am UTC
Thank you.
Donna C. Jan 9, 2012, 9:42pm UTC
Wonderful!! (2nd time)
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:10am UTC
Thank you.
Thank you.
Thank you.
Donna C. Jan 9, 2012, 9:44pm UTC
I don't know what happens to my comments, and then they all show up!!
Gather must have gremlins!!
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:11am UTC
I still think it's a UFO parked high in the sky over your house.
Elsie Duggan Jan 9, 2012, 11:32pm UTC
Beautifully written William, we have all traveled this road, and you do it with such ease, it is a pleasure to read, goodnight , I love you, Elsie
William Dotani Jan 10, 2012, 1:13am UTC
The path is shown in all time zones.
Thank you. Sweet dreams.
Patricia J. Jan 10, 2012, 9:30am UTC
The road more traveled ounds wonderful in your words, Bill.
William Dotani Jan 11, 2012, 2:48am UTC
Follow the yellow brick road.
Thank you.
Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 10, 2012, 1:42pm UTC
all I feel you're a great soul!
William Dotani Jan 11, 2012, 2:50am UTC
Personally I have great doubts I'll make it into Heaven, but will be reincarnated hopefully as a rabbit, but probably my fate will be as a wild turkey.
Thank you.
Kimberly Blackadar Jan 12, 2012, 12:37am UTC
William, you create such beautiful lines, and when I read your poems, they're always fresh and new. Your style continues to reinvent itself.

I especially liked these verses:
Crayon drawings travel miles
Time becomes conscious layers

Thank you for responding to the WWE prompt!
William Dotani Jan 12, 2012, 1:15am UTC
That's very kind of you to say. A while ago I took a fresh look at Bob Dylan's verse and saw how he used associatives of something related that would change the angle of thought and often be a metaphor bringing heavy meaning to the theme.
Frankly, I am now 3 years past a devastating stroke. My Mom has since told me I was near death. My Mom is simply amazed I can walk again. There have been mental changes as well and let's just say my mind is developing.
Thank you.
Kimberly Blackadar Jan 12, 2012, 1:29am UTC
It's amazing how the mind and body can recover. You're proof of that!

Now featured at Gather Writing Essential.
William Dotani Jan 12, 2012, 1:46am UTC
My body is much better. TY.
William Dotani Jan 13, 2012, 4:26am UTC
Have you an onion skin or do you like to be roasted?
Karen E. Jan 17, 2012, 2:00am UTC
William, I did not know. So very glad you pressed on to share your heart with us. Even more valuable now that I know.
Question...yes, a very big one.
William Dotani Jan 17, 2012, 2:09am UTC
Always a quandry at how much to disclose.
Kimberly Blackadar Jan 17, 2012, 8:20am UTC
Writing tends to bring it out in all of us, William. Don't you agree?
William Dotani Jan 18, 2012, 2:11am UTC
Writing is simply my adult sandbox.
Kimberly Blackadar Jan 18, 2012, 8:00am UTC
You hit a homerun with that anaology, William. So...should we chat metaphorically this week? The only problem is, I'm in the minors and you play in the major leagues. (I didn't want to mix metaphors, you know?)
William Dotani Jan 20, 2012, 3:10am UTC
but I get splinters from always sitting on the bench.
Marge H. Jan 12, 2012, 12:56pm UTC
Beautiful and profound
William Dotani Jan 13, 2012, 4:20am UTC
Quite nice of you to say.
Thank you.

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