Still Lake needs a pebble~Wednesday Writing...

Complexed, demanding lines, angles

zigzags and just scribbling

sprayed it with crimson and cobalt,

wished to be hung in the living

and I called it a painting.

didn’t realize, while destroying rebuilding the odds

I was rebuilding and reforming myself

first era, where transition tip-toed .

watched geese flying to sun

signaling the transitions

travelling from joy to happiness,

through feelings to emotions

carnivores to herbivores.

didn’t realize while exploring and experiencing

yesterday to today to tomorrow

Second era transpired with failures- recycled in success.

anticipating the unexpected events

The Banyan-tree fell on earth

melting, moving, decomposing

water to tears, tears to soil

slowly witnessing the native land vacant.

didn't realize while bidding adieu

third era is unanswered- mystery, magic or Miracle

Life is Death reborn ?

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Wednesday’s Prompt:Write about transitions or use transitional words in your post. Post poetry, prose, a memoir, nonfiction, or an essay

Comments: 37

Larry H. Jan 3, 2012, 6:18pm UTC

THANKS FOR SHARING

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 3, 2012, 6:59pm UTC

Thanks,Larry.

René Allen Aug 17, 2012, 2:51pm UTC

EXCELLENT Buzzy!

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Richard Lynn Livesay Jan 3, 2012, 6:28pm UTC

Cooool...into the artist's psyche...surreally...really good

thanks for sharing with Surreal Circus

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 3, 2012, 6:59pm UTC

Thanks,Richard.I tried:)

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Jas K. Jan 3, 2012, 6:49pm UTC

I think you are right. At first, I thought you were going to talk about vectors, then I realized it was really about animals when I read about the goose. Still, when you discuss trees and soil and recycling, you might really be trying to get us to think about the environment.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 3, 2012, 6:58pm UTC

I am trying to portray three eras of life.First, where my childood to youth, second exploring things to my adulthood and then to life-cycle where death means transition,too.from this world to other unknown world.art,nature and life three things are essential to know Transitions.Hope you find this okay. Thanks, Jas K for your comment.I appreciate it.

Jas K. Jan 4, 2012, 2:05am UTC

Oh. I guess I really messed that up.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 9:53pm UTC

always good to hear readers' perspective, I really liked your views.Happy new year!

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Kathryn Flynn Jan 3, 2012, 6:55pm UTC

really insightful into the multi facets of your mind, bhawana. excellent.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 3, 2012, 7:00pm UTC

walking through one channel to other, Kathryn.Love and thanks

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elizabeth evans Jan 3, 2012, 7:59pm UTC

Amazing how the mind operates as it tries to understand the cycle of life. Well done, Buzz.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 12:57pm UTC

so tuff to know the truth and wait for the next transition.Thanks,Bob.Happy new year

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Janet "Jax" B. Jan 3, 2012, 10:42pm UTC

Good job Buzzy

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 12:56pm UTC

Thanks,Janet.Happy new year dear

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William Dotani Jan 4, 2012, 2:18am UTC

Your poem speaks of awareness of life's cycle.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 12:56pm UTC

Thanks,William.Hope new year started well.

William Dotani Jan 12, 2012, 1:59am UTC

No, it did not. I simply have been feeling quite ill. I am finally getting better. Life is what it is. I'm not complaining.

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JOHN BECK Jan 4, 2012, 8:53am UTC

One brilliant line after another. Excellent poetry, Buzzy.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 12:55pm UTC

Thanks,John.much regards!

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Kimberly Blackadar Jan 4, 2012, 10:08am UTC

Buzzy, you captured the three stages well in this poem. I like how you characterized the milestones of childhood as "where transition tip-toed" and finished with the "mystery, magic or Miracle" of the third era.

Overall, my favorite stanza is the first: I could see the painting.

Thank you for your response to the WWE prompt.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 12:54pm UTC

I am reliving those moments, again watching my kids making the same paintings.Third era was quite dificult to describe.I never used the word death for my mom, always had faith that she went through transition phase to other world.It's a cycle of life, like Dec month will be back again, I hope that she is reborn somewhere.Thanks for the encouraging comments.I appreciate it.

Kimberly Blackadar Jan 4, 2012, 2:33pm UTC

Yes, some things are hard to describe, but that's why I like poetry. Sometimes we can create an image or an idea and the reader can take something from it. That was very general, but you know what I mean...I hope.

You're welcome, Buzzy. I hope you continue to post to the WWE prompts.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 10:03pm UTC

Hope,every Poet's muse, too.I agree with you.The whole idea emerged while throwing a pebble in pond and watching out those jolly ripples.Thanks,Kimberly. I will be posting soon.

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Kasey Klein Jan 4, 2012, 2:32pm UTC

nicely done!

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 10:04pm UTC

Your two words are precious,Karl ! Thanks .

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Diane Huizenga Jan 4, 2012, 4:15pm UTC

wonderful

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Jan 4, 2012, 10:04pm UTC

Thanks,Diane.What an awesome photo album you have.I am so impressed!

Diane Huizenga Jan 5, 2012, 12:06am UTC

Thanks so much

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Mary Beth Magee Jan 5, 2012, 1:03am UTC

Life is full of angles and corners. How nice that the circle of friendship smooths the bumps. Nice job!

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 31, 2012, 2:23pm UTC

such great words Mary.much thanks

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Dr. Ashok Saxena Jan 7, 2012, 8:13am UTC

this poem shows artist in u a beautiful composition

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 31, 2012, 2:23pm UTC

Thanks Papa

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Angela A. Jan 7, 2012, 10:41pm UTC

Very lovely!

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Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 31, 2012, 2:23pm UTC

Thanks Angela.

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Barbary C. Jul 31, 2012, 10:49pm UTC

I simply love the title! Full of whimsy, maybe even intrigue - it drew me into your poem.

Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Aug 31, 2012, 2:22pm UTC

Thanks,Barbary.Transition, this word always takes me to the surreal world which deeply connects me to the real world.Life, death both owes each other.

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