by William Dotani
Member since:
October 27, 2006

No I In Any Glances : Wednesday Writing Essentials (Infamy)

December 12, 2011 01:03 AM UTC
views: 0 | 12 people recommend this | comments: 44

I cannot accept any praise
I can only be a vessel of giving
For when I dream into the universe
There is no I in any glances
We are but here as our brother’s keeper

All lines of personality
Hollow spaces, coloring books tasteless
Individual meets reality
There is no I in any glances
Prohibit a verb asking circumstance

When does the wind fashion a base
Where pretend never found or sensing replaced
Nothing quite so shallow meandering
There is no I in any glances
Ought to and maybe with tick tock askance

Each cauldron soaking in the fire
Evolving dances blending in time fading
Remembering then of experience
There is no I in any glances
There is but here of moments resolving

Gratitude, always feeling warmth
Rely, refrain, there is, where meets why to speak
Exploration in within silent tone
There is no I in any glances
And shadows on bridges remind silence

Originate truth testament
Completely constraining within consonants
Ablation of restraint, guilt is let loose
There is no I in any glances
Conducting an inventory of rules

Defray chances of yesterday
Defining questions of awaiting answers
Defy expectations that waft away
There is no I in any glances
Nor infamy in heart, love ingratiated 

 

Comments: 44

Barbara H. Dec 12, 2011, 1:19am UTC
Oh, William, what a wonderful, wonderful tribute to your fellow man. It has indeed spoken what I have always thought as your true essence. YES, we ARE our BROTHER's KEEPER! Amen!
Such a beautiful use of words.
William Dotani Dec 12, 2011, 1:26am UTC
The feeling while writing this was rather peaceful. Your comment is lovely.
Thank you.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 12, 2011, 9:10am UTC
The feeling while reading it was rather peaceful as well, William.
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:19am UTC
That's nice of you to say.
Elsie Duggan Dec 12, 2011, 1:48am UTC
Exactly what Barbara said William, another wonderful piece of writing, I am happy you are peaceful, I am too at this moment and going to bed, I can't stay up anymore, and sadly behind in commenting, but will try and fix that this week as I feel better , (I hope). Take care of yourself, goodnight, I love you, Elsie
William Dotani Dec 12, 2011, 1:53am UTC
It is good to retire early so you can have more beautiful dreams to greet the dawning. Take care.
Thank you.
Jean R B. Dec 12, 2011, 2:23am UTC
Beautiful work. Cast your bread upon the water and it does come back when you least expect it.A thoughtful deed for one's brother is always rewarded.
William Dotani Dec 12, 2011, 2:35am UTC
So true. Reward needs not substance.
Thank you.
No ego in any glances ....
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:23am UTC
In Zen the problem of desire is manufactured from the ego.
Thank you.

I sure hope you did not mean Eggo muffins.
All our problems stem from the ego, the truth be told.

I'm not into muffins.
William Dotani Dec 14, 2011, 1:48am UTC
Personally I waffle.
Don't we all?
William Dotani Dec 14, 2011, 3:57am UTC
I get pancaked too.
With maple syrup, I hope.
William Dotani Dec 16, 2011, 1:13am UTC
Only if pure.
JOHN BECK Dec 12, 2011, 7:37am UTC
Beautiful thoughts and sounds, and the repetition works well.
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:25am UTC
The script and imagery of a movie would not seem enjoyable without music in the background. I feel the same is true of verse.
Thank you.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 12, 2011, 9:13am UTC
What a "vessel" you are, William! This poem offers such a peaceful view of man's purpose, and I like how you set the refrain as the fourth line.

Thank you for posting this beautiful poem to the WWE prompt!
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:27am UTC
We all have a mission. Some are grand and some minor, but whatever this mission may be, we should strive for quality and quality is always found in caring and sharing.
Thank you.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 13, 2011, 8:29am UTC
whatever this mission may be, we should strive for quality

Those are very wise words, William.
William Dotani Dec 14, 2011, 1:48am UTC
TY.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 14, 2011, 5:20pm UTC
Now featured at Gather Writing Essential.
William Dotani Dec 15, 2011, 2:55am UTC
That's nice of you. You must be in the Christmas spirit.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 15, 2011, 9:19am UTC
You intended that to be funny, didn't you? Well...I got a laugh out of it, William. Your writing deserves a feature--whether I've been blessed with the Christmas spirit or not.
William Dotani Dec 16, 2011, 1:25am UTC
Of course I Was joking. When I'm not joking, it is very obvious because I'm very direct. Let me give you an example: I was having problems with one lady who had said some unflatterring words about a comment I had made about a French recipe. I had thought my comment positive, but this lady was probably having a bad time of the month. She lambasted me and wanted to see my birth certificate. I finally had had enough and I replied, 'Ms Itch, I do not understand why you think of words when it's obvious your mouth should only be used for eating and nothing else. Since you love French food, I sincerely hope your next serving of frog legs has gristle in it.

Her reply was to lambast me for my callous treatment of frogs.
Reedeep.
Kimberly Blackadar Dec 16, 2011, 8:27am UTC
:)
William Dotani Dec 17, 2011, 12:18am UTC
I watched too much Monty Python and read too much James G. Thurber in the bath with my Catholic rubber ducky (a present).
CL Mareydt Dec 12, 2011, 9:40am UTC
ALL the above comments sum up my exact words too ... :)

Catching up with views & comments :)

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THANK YOU FOR SHARING AT SURREAL CIRCUS!
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:28am UTC
I appreciate that. Ring those bells.
Peter Joseph Swanson Dec 12, 2011, 11:43am UTC
Magnificent!
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:29am UTC
Thank you.
Doug Westberg Dec 12, 2011, 12:54pm UTC
Very accomplished and rewarding. Thanks for this.
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:29am UTC
I appreciate deeply the word rewarding.
Donna C. Dec 12, 2011, 9:52pm UTC
I think this is one of your finest, William. I really enjoyed it......Thank you!!
William Dotani Dec 13, 2011, 12:33am UTC
I had been working on this for a while. I must have editted some lines 5 or 6 times. I wanted to write something of positive contemplation the reader can associate with the goodwill of this holiday season. Those are nice words. Thank you.
Donna C. Dec 13, 2011, 10:09pm UTC
I could tell that you had put a lot into this poem. It was so very nice to read. Thank you again.....
William Dotani Dec 14, 2011, 1:49am UTC
TY.
jeanne clarke Dec 13, 2011, 6:58am UTC
One of your most relaxed pieces, William. A pleasant feeling while reading this!
William Dotani Dec 14, 2011, 1:52am UTC
Glad to hear this.
Thank you.
Ms Lee P. Dec 14, 2011, 7:30am UTC
There is always an "I" in all things, even the least suspect things, even the smallest unnoticed deed. Look carefully and really close and I'll just bet you'll see one. Just when I think I have eradicated it, it sneaks in and there it is. Darn! I just hate to think it makes my head hurt .... LOL! Nice work William.
William Dotani Dec 15, 2011, 1:06am UTC
I is fine, but not when desire controls the I's actions.
Thank you.
Patricia J. Dec 14, 2011, 8:29am UTC
A very beautiful poem, Bill. I like your style.
William Dotani Dec 15, 2011, 1:06am UTC
I appreciate that.

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