"GOOD MORNING MARY"

"Good morning Mary"

Mary has blues eyes awakening...

Beyond the window opens slowly the morning.

Softly Upon the carpet Gently

Swiftly The cat glides Gracefully

Away Away into the mystery Away

From off The mangroves From off

Misting Dip of the chalk Misting

Marsh Drinking of fresh May Marsh

Wings Out of dawn Wings

Flapping The Spoonbills rise Flapping

Flapping Banking in deep reflection Flapping

Mary jumps from her bed and bounces

curles from out of her eyes the better

to read the open book before her.

Swiftly Through the open curtains Gracefully

Softly And across the fence Gently

A meadow lark calls:

"GOOD MORNING MARY"

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Susan Budig - Mindful Poet May 19, 2011, 2:26pm UTC

Bill, this is a concrete poem, yes? I'm accepting it into Mindful Poetry as such. Thank you. :-)

It's a visually pretty piece. I'm fond of blue. This one brings a picture of morning glories to mind.

william d. May 20, 2011, 12:15am UTC

Susan, I was so anxious to show this to you that I forgot to check to see if it actually had a form. My homework assignment will be to check out what a "concrete poem" is. You are very kind.

Veronica Hosking May 20, 2011, 12:30pm UTC

A flower okay. I was wondering what shape you saw, Susan. I do like blue and the form of the poem, too. Not sure I see a flower maybe an hourglass or boat.

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet May 20, 2011, 3:49pm UTC

Shaped or Concrete poetry is rather a misnomer in this case, Veronica. To me, this poem is clearly visual art as well as poetry and I believe that qualifies it for concrete poetry.

No, I don't see a specific shape, more a field of blue flowers with their variant hues.

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet May 20, 2011, 3:51pm UTC

Bill, I recommend you go to Mindful Poetry's home page and use the search box *there* for looking up poetic forms. I've been writing a new form via column since September, 2008 and so there are a lot of types of poetry covered.

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Bernard C. May 19, 2011, 4:06pm UTC

Interesting format - nicely done - thanks for sharing :-)

Thanks for submitting to
The Surreal Circus.

william d. May 20, 2011, 12:17am UTC

And thank you for reading it. I am trying to learn my way around...to sort of test the waters and see how this all works.

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Kimberly Ripley May 19, 2011, 10:21pm UTC

So incredibly creative!

Featured in the Thursday Writing Essential!

william d. May 20, 2011, 12:25am UTC

It took Susan Budig to entice me into writing poetry again (may contests). So far I am just cracking my poetic muscles. Me thinks it will be nice to run this ridge to see where it leads. Thank you for featuring this poem.

Susan Budig - Mindful Poet May 20, 2011, 3:46pm UTC

Surely this can't be true? Bill, you have an amazing poetic voice. It's been dormant for some time, then?

We have a lot of look forward to, Kimberly.

william d. May 20, 2011, 4:01pm UTC

Actually I have written since 5 yrs-old. Three books (as boye books go) by the end of sixth grade. Several long narrative poems since graduating from college (several chapters each). But my last poetry for the most part has been 2003. I find after hibernation like that I make rather enjoyable personal progress. And you, Susan...with your poetic-forms have triggered something a bit more disciplined in my poetic direction. Thank you.

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Barbary C. Jun 16, 2011, 9:36pm UTC

You have grace in your words, William.

I think you deserve praise for an incredible concentration of thought to lay out the form.

william d. Jun 16, 2011, 10:45pm UTC

Thank you

Barbary C. Jul 6, 2011, 3:52pm UTC

Reading again...

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Connie C. Jun 16, 2011, 10:50pm UTC

That is amazing. The colors made it so appealing as well.

william d. Jun 16, 2011, 11:12pm UTC

Connie...in 2002 (for reasons wonderful but not to be elaborated here) my poetry exploded into multiple poems comprising one poem. Separated and expanded/united by color. To see some of what I wrote back then "click" on my name and go to my photos.

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Mustafa Demiri Sep 22, 2011, 12:26am UTC

Beautifully rendered, in all aspects... colour, content, and concept... a sincere delight.

william d. Sep 22, 2011, 12:48am UTC

Thank you very much

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JOHN BECK Sep 22, 2011, 8:53am UTC

Very creative. The poem doesn't suffer by fitting the form. Well done.

william d. Sep 22, 2011, 10:01am UTC

Thank you John

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Granny Janny Sep 24, 2011, 7:00pm UTC

Do you mean curls from her eyes? I've never seen that spelling before.
The poem is fresh like the morning.

william d. Sep 24, 2011, 8:16pm UTC

Yes I meant curls from her eyes. What you will discover in my poetry is sort of an old-English, Scottish, Irish brogue type poetic liberty with language. For me correct spelling is like a stop sign in New York...a suggestion. I add "e"s where ever I feel like it. lol. "Coffeee" for instance...I have not spelled it with two for over nine years. Thank you for your input :)

william d. Sep 24, 2011, 8:25pm UTC

Actually there is a bit more to the "e" thang. After a very serious car wreck (I was 17) that crushed my head a bit...one of the type head-aches I get alters language. One month during horrid headaches I created my own language. Our youngest daughter picked right up on it...to this day she probably remembers it. I don't. That lefty/righty braine stuff can multiply when it should divide...and, I might add, add lovely charm.

Granny Janny Sep 24, 2011, 8:37pm UTC

I'm charmed.

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