Wilting Each Delay : (Character: Monday Writing...

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Bernard C. Mar 28, 2011, 1:27pm UTC

Wilt indeed through to delays - that's an interesting take on writings as well - The last stanza is my favourite at this moment in a first reading - thanks for sharing :-)

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William Dotani Mar 28, 2011, 1:33pm UTC

I rarely am so directly personal, but this is how I feel.
Thank you.

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A. F. Stewart Mar 28, 2011, 4:17pm UTC

Some succinct thoughts on winter.

William Dotani Mar 28, 2011, 4:46pm UTC

It's what Winter did to my health.
Thank you.

(I'm having problems with leg/foot cramps).

Donald M. Mar 28, 2011, 5:33pm UTC

BTW The poem was very good.

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Donald M. Mar 28, 2011, 5:06pm UTC

I am sorry Winter took such a toll on your health. I thought I wanted Spring so much, but when it came the pollen and things that make me ill came with it. The lung Dr. had already only given me 25 percent of hope to live anyway. So I will make the best of it.

Sensational Sadie Sexy Senior Sitizen Mar 28, 2011, 5:13pm UTC

Norma, take good care of yourself and show those doctors that God still has things here for you to do. Positive thoughts have been proven to prolong life. I am praying extra hard for you to get better.
William I want to hear of improvement for you too.

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 12:06am UTC

I too pray you get better Norma.
Thank you.

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Chris Brockman Mar 28, 2011, 5:28pm UTC

Your twin themes of exhuastion by winter and hope by spring that have haunted your poetry of late sshare the page, here. I hope you get full blown spring soon! It was 86, here, last Thursday, but it snowed just a little today and didn't get out of the 40's!

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 12:08am UTC

We're stuck in the 30's. It was 17 yesterday morning and is suppose to be 19 this morn. You're spot on. Thank you.

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Tracy Fabre Mar 28, 2011, 6:07pm UTC

Excellent day, excellent day
Looking at buds of hope

It has been! The sun was out, it's 60+ degrees, and my fridge didn't blow up!

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 12:11am UTC

but what lurks inside your fridge behind the taller jars? Do you ever wonder what the sound an Alien life form makes. Did you sunbathe today?
Thank you.

Tracy Fabre Mar 29, 2011, 12:19am UTC

I have heard that alien, and it lives in my ice-maker and wants to kill me. Anytime a plastic ice bucket can be scorched while IN the freezer, Things Are Bad.

You're welcome.

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 12:39am UTC

Please be careful. I suggest you drink only warm beer.

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Adriane B. Mar 28, 2011, 6:49pm UTC

I felt your pain and wanted to send you warmth. Hope the change in seasons find you a trasformation. :) Loved your words thank you for sharing.

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 12:11am UTC

I appreciate your kindness. Thank you.

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JOHN BECK Mar 28, 2011, 9:07pm UTC

So you're your own character. Clever, Bill. Here's wishing you better days.

elizabeth evans Mar 28, 2011, 10:24pm UTC

Ditto.

William Dotani Mar 28, 2011, 11:49pm UTC

I think that's okay.
Thank you.

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Busy Buzzy Bee 'Gather Proud Mamarazzi' Mar 29, 2011, 2:50am UTC

Winter brought great flavors in your poety,William

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 2:58am UTC

Nice to see you again. I'm quite tired. I hope all is well with you and family.
Thank you.

Elsie Duggan Mar 29, 2011, 4:10am UTC

A sad autobiographical poem William, but spring warmth will make you feel better soon, and I hope you get some rest, Take good care of yourself,
I love you, , goodnight, or morning now, love Elsie

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 5:09pm UTC

Yes it is sad. Winter has been tough. Just letting go some angst.
Thank you.

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Mar 29, 2011, 5:36am UTC

I suspect you're kinda fed up with winter. Don't come to West Oz - you'd be praying for winter. LOL

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 5:15pm UTC

I lived in Osaka with no A/C and 37~41 C temps for about two days, then it fell down to 35. Those two days were hell, but I survived this better than 3 bloody months of cold Winter.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Mar 29, 2011, 8:00pm UTC

Here, two days of high temperature goes by almost unnoticed. It is the unrelenting summer heat that can get hard to endure - especially during February and well into March. This year, the real heat (that began in mid-December) is still with us, and it is almost April. I'd love some of your cold!

William Dotani Mar 30, 2011, 11:45am UTC

and I thought you wore shorts as the back up guitarist for AC/DC.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Mar 30, 2011, 6:56pm UTC

William Dotani Mar 31, 2011, 3:07am UTC

I do not know why people in hot climes do not mimic the Beduoins. I'm a Geography major and really looked deeply at different cultures. This does not mean you need to become Muslim, but a prayer rug is always a good buy. It's basically layering. I did it in Japan and I do it here it hot weather. Basically it's dressing the same as you do for Winter. It at first is very uncomfortable, but then is quite relaxing and cooling, but it can cause you to stink and in case this happens you can always blame beans.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Mar 31, 2011, 7:43pm UTC

We don't bother with any of that. We go the to beach and surf.

William Dotani Apr 1, 2011, 12:07am UTC

I heard you have aggressive clams near Perth that bite people's toes when they take a surfboard in the water.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Apr 1, 2011, 6:57am UTC

Actually, we don't have clams - not a one. True!

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Marge H. Mar 29, 2011, 1:56pm UTC

The bleakness of winter, the promise of spring. Unfortunately, spring has been a tease so far in WI.

Marge H. Mar 29, 2011, 2:00pm UTC

I hope springs brings good health to you.

William Dotani Mar 29, 2011, 5:16pm UTC

Thank you.

Should I hope you have a blizzard

at Dairy Queen.

Marge H. Mar 29, 2011, 6:37pm UTC

A Dairy Queen blizzard would be nice. But no more sky dandruff, PLEASE!

William Dotani Mar 30, 2011, 11:43am UTC

After looking at the eastern Wisconsin weather report, there was a warning not to go outside and act out the song Head, Shoulders, Knees and Toes. The reason is you will have so much snow you won't be able to see your knees and toes and singing just half the song is not suggested in these conditions.

lynn a. Mar 31, 2011, 7:51pm UTC

Spring's been a cruel, cruel teaser here too, and it just won't let up. 1 good day and then days of biting chilly winds and gray dreary days.

Hope you get to feeling better.

William Dotani Apr 1, 2011, 12:10am UTC

The past few days not so good, but I have my ups and downs. I still love spinning yarns.
I hope your weather improves soon.
Thank you.

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Ruthi C. Mar 31, 2011, 9:33am UTC

Excellent take on the SADness of winter in body and spirit. Loved that next to last stanza fully promising washings. Although, it's a red-headed woodpecker outside my office window this morning! I hope he pecks the white off the bark that Mother Nature left a bit of yesterday.

William Dotani Apr 1, 2011, 12:13am UTC

It's more than sadness as I have suffered a few physical setbacks this Winter. I trust I will be able to get better in the sunshine of warm weather.
I wish you warming winds.
Thank you.

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DIANE D. Apr 1, 2011, 11:25am UTC

Great write!

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