The Defeat of Finality

Whetstone: Just another few more words, inspired by Emily

I often ponder my final breath

Or the final inch I’ll walk

I wonder of my final test

And the final word I’ll talk

And who will share my final hour

To watch me fade away

Will my final moment be at night

Or my last goodbye by day

All these ‘finals’, ‘tis moribund,

Blowin’ across the land and sea,

But then I think – there’ll be no more ‘finals’

Entombed within God’s eternity

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marlene s. Mar 7, 2011, 6:24pm UTC

Those words seem so down and dreary...Hope all is well with you..,Friends

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 7, 2011, 6:32pm UTC

But the ending of the poem holds hope.

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Sandy Moore Mar 7, 2011, 6:49pm UTC

There is always hope as you have stated.

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Priya P. Mar 7, 2011, 6:59pm UTC

A hope poem. Nice :)

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Angela A. Mar 7, 2011, 7:04pm UTC

The poem doth set my heart all a titter!

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Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 7, 2011, 7:16pm UTC

awww sweetie, if only my kiss could do that. (Just kidding Donald)

Angela A. Mar 7, 2011, 8:41pm UTC

You know Donald by now. He'd be cool with it. Ha, ha.

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 8, 2011, 11:21am UTC

He just wants to sell some videos........

Angela A. Mar 8, 2011, 8:51pm UTC

Probably. I don't doubt it. ;)

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elizabeth evans Mar 7, 2011, 7:57pm UTC

Thanks for posting to Triple Name Club.

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Kushal Poddar Mar 7, 2011, 8:16pm UTC

brother, finality comes unknowingly but these words defy it. Amazing and direct from the heart

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 7, 2011, 8:28pm UTC

Thanks brudder, you're in my heart. Give all of Kolkata a "hello" from me.

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Lisa Frost Bailey Mar 8, 2011, 7:15am UTC

an end or just the beginning?

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Dennis Gilman Mar 8, 2011, 9:56am UTC

When I awake
and paradise see
make sure you're there
to welcome me.

Dennis Gilman Mar 8, 2011, 9:57am UTC

Part of the instructions to my wife.

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 8, 2011, 10:09am UTC

nice.

Dennis Gilman Mar 8, 2011, 10:22am UTC

Glad you like it. I'm usually not this good at poetry.

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 8, 2011, 11:01am UTC

I wouldn't notice Dennis, I'm not a poet.

Dennis Gilman Mar 8, 2011, 11:06am UTC

Yeah right :-P)

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Bernard C. Mar 8, 2011, 1:05pm UTC

That's quire a viewpoint to be taking in the land of the living all is supposed to be forward looking - not all doom and gloom - good observation all the same - thanks for sharing :-)

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Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 8, 2011, 1:19pm UTC

Pretty sure it comes out of my fear of growing old (and dying) alone. Writer's write what we know and good or bad, I am familiar with gloom.

But sometimes, the light pours through, too.

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Sandi S. Mar 8, 2011, 1:28pm UTC

A prediction:

You'll be on the plains in Africa, photographing a gazelle. Your last breath will be of fresh air, freedom, and the excitement of getting that glorious shot. And then... home in a flash of light with the gates open before you.

Ok...
That was supposed to be poetic, not creepy. Hope it was! :)

Robert - just a simple man - B. Mar 8, 2011, 3:10pm UTC

I could deal with that scenario just nicely my dear. I'm glad you left out the part where I stepped on that black adder. ewwww.

Sandi S. Mar 8, 2011, 3:47pm UTC

Well, I was going to say the gazelle got you, but it seemed unintentionally awkward!

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