by Sheila Deeth
Member since:
February 1, 2007

Love's Nightmare - Saturday Writing Essentials

February 08, 2011 05:20 PM UTC
views: 0 | 12 people recommend this | comments: 16

Vines tightened their grip; thorns dug deep; blood dripped like rain on rose-petals. And Sam woke up.

Jean, in rose-colored nightdress, leaned over him. “You were struggling Sam.” Her biting anger soothed by sleep; Sam thought how love’s pale blossoms turn to thorns. Don’t fight. He gathered hope into his arms.

 

Challenge: Write the last (few) paragraphs or stanzas of a story or poem that ends with the protagonist waking from a dream. Then, add dialogue or exposition (or a combination) that explains something in the plot that required the whole thing to be a dream.



Comments: 16

Bernard C. Feb 8, 2011, 5:33pm UTC
Good use of the prompt - a flowery dream that can be a nightmare of sorts - thanks for sharing :-)
A. F. Stewart Feb 8, 2011, 5:48pm UTC
A nice view of the prompt.
JOHN BECK Feb 8, 2011, 6:23pm UTC
Wow! That last sentence is special, and the color of her gown symbolic. Well done, Sheila.
Marge H. Feb 9, 2011, 11:36am UTC
This is wonderful, Sheila. I also love the last sentence.
Angela A. Feb 9, 2011, 1:05pm UTC
The horror of nightmares!
Thanks for posting to my Anythingwriting group.
G.M. Jackson Feb 9, 2011, 5:25pm UTC
The blood and thorns definitely got my attention.
Len Maxwell Feb 11, 2011, 1:59pm UTC
Definitely an attention-grabber. I can see several different ways you could go with that in a later story.

Thank you for taking the SatWE challenge.
Len Maxwell Feb 12, 2011, 5:23pm UTC
The nice thing about Saturday is that I can now feature this on Gather Writing Essential.
Barbary Chaapel Feb 11, 2011, 10:26pm UTC
Well done, Sheila. I wondered how this could be written. You've solved the puzzle!
William Dotani Feb 12, 2011, 12:33am UTC
The metaphor of an angry woman trying to resist the passion on both sides of the fine line. Quite surreal.
Barb Carlson Feb 12, 2011, 12:34am UTC
Oooo ... almost creepy!
Benita K. Feb 12, 2011, 3:09am UTC
I want to go back. I want to know what happened, why she was angry. Good writing always brings questions. Well done.
Benita K. Feb 12, 2011, 3:10am UTC
And good editing? What happened to my question Marks ??? for goodness sake?
grrrrrr
Richard Thuss Feb 12, 2011, 11:06am UTC
I really love the words and the pace in that first line, sheila
Ruthi C. Feb 12, 2011, 2:59pm UTC
Splendid, Sheila! You always say so much in such few words.
C.F. Stewart Feb 13, 2011, 2:34pm UTC
You are so in your element here, Sheila. Appealingly clever and highly imaginative.

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