Essence Shifts and Sifts

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Peter Joseph Swanson Aug 23, 2009, 12:55pm UTC

What a beautiful fantasy !!!

William Dotani Aug 23, 2009, 1:28pm UTC

Thank you Peter.

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Marilyn is looking for whatever there is. N. Aug 23, 2009, 12:55pm UTC

Yes, LIFE! This is my favorite line of them all...

Let our hearts melt into Suns

I know why and wish it to be so.
Wonderful, uplifting, just what I really needed today..,
Marilyn

William Dotani Aug 23, 2009, 1:29pm UTC

That my words can give you something positive makes my soul smile. Thank you.

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Barbara H. Aug 23, 2009, 1:32pm UTC

Fields and fields of dreams!!!!!! Rest does you good William. Each time I start wondering where you are you post and tell me. My! You have a beautiful mind. Your heart speaks for itself and we appreciate it all!

William Dotani Aug 23, 2009, 1:46pm UTC

I've been working for 3 days on this verse. I need to get back to work soon. I know you envy me because I have to weed the garden filled with bees.

Barbara H. Aug 23, 2009, 2:37pm UTC

Drone a little and move real slow and those little buggers will just think there is a new worker on the block! Better yet offer them a bouquet!....whatever you do don't get stung!
Working among growing things (even weeds have a beauty of their own) will bring you more inspiration and poetry you will share with us!

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JOHN BECK Aug 23, 2009, 2:08pm UTC

FLY. Yes, the poem soars and glides. A word serenade.
Don't mind the bees, Bill. Wasps are a different matter but I've pulled weeds from under honey bees and they just move to a different weed.

William Dotani Dec 28, 2009, 11:19am UTC

Honeybees are happiest when you pull dandelions.

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Henry Married for 11+yrs ~ until Jesus Return Johnson Aug 23, 2009, 2:12pm UTC

well written William, you have sure talent.

Barbara H. Aug 23, 2009, 2:42pm UTC

Yes Bill I agree. Your poetry has a beauty that speaks to the heart and brings with it its own melody. I love the movement of your work. It always carries me along with it.

William Dotani Aug 27, 2009, 12:45pm UTC

From age 19 until 2 years ago, my writing centered on song lyrics and a few short stories. All thouse years made me quite lyrical in my poetry writing.

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Ellie !. Aug 23, 2009, 2:38pm UTC

I liked it from the very first line.
:-)

William Dotani Sep 6, 2009, 9:54am UTC

Thanks. I like the first line of your comment.

Ellie !. Sep 7, 2009, 12:24am UTC

Thanks...I needed the smile.

William Dotani Dec 28, 2009, 11:20am UTC

I write fairly serious yet positive poems and enjoy this. However giving you or others a smile is my ambition. TY.

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Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Aug 23, 2009, 7:56pm UTC

Serene imagery that floats.

William Dotani Aug 25, 2009, 1:39am UTC

They sell a banana float boat at the ice cream shop. So, I take it that's your imagery.

Magi the magical poet is flowing with the wind Aug 25, 2009, 4:46am UTC

A banana float boat sounds heavenly. LOL

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Lisa Frost Bailey Aug 23, 2009, 10:08pm UTC

Beautiful imagery, flowing verse, uplifting spirit!! It is wonderful.

William Dotani Aug 25, 2009, 1:40am UTC

Your comment is music to my ears. Thank you.

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Marianne M. Aug 23, 2009, 10:29pm UTC

I think this poem is different from what you usually write, Bill ... lighter, more fanciful, almost dreamy in quality ... but quite wonderful, none-the-less. How are you?

William Dotani Aug 24, 2009, 10:54am UTC

Except for my shoulder, I'm fine. I'm really driven to get my chores finished. Maybe I'm dreaming of getting things done. Thank you.

William Dotani Aug 25, 2009, 1:47am UTC

I read this over and see I need a few edits in the last two stanza. This might sound strange but I was trying to have a seamless flow that could capture thought of a pleasant experience by word cueing. I was having fun and playing with this poem like it was some board game while writing it. Writing is fun.

Marianne M. Aug 25, 2009, 9:55am UTC

I agree that writing is fun, Bill ... I love it or I wouldn't spend so much of my time here at my computer, putting words together. While our styles are very different, I think we both share the same commitment.

William Dotani Aug 27, 2009, 11:51am UTC

I imagine we do, but the one thing that seems to be important to any good writer is simply the joy of writing down our thoughts. I believe quality in a writing depends heavily on joy.

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Ed Da Head Toker Aug 24, 2009, 3:55am UTC

a nice read

William Dotani Dec 28, 2009, 11:21am UTC

I thought so too. TY.

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Marge H. Aug 27, 2009, 2:07pm UTC

How wonderful to hear that your writing gives you so much joy! Reading it gives me great joy so that seems only fair.

William Dotani Aug 31, 2009, 8:38am UTC

Your comment gives me joy.

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Sheila Deeth Aug 28, 2009, 7:32pm UTC

Flying. Delightful.

William Dotani Dec 28, 2009, 11:21am UTC

TY.

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Curt L. Sep 1, 2009, 12:36pm UTC

Love this, William!

William Dotani Dec 28, 2009, 11:22am UTC

TY.

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Debra H. Sep 3, 2009, 12:17am UTC

Calgon ... take me away! Love it William!

William Dotani Sep 6, 2009, 9:53am UTC

Thanks. Your comment made me laugh.

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barb n. Sep 16, 2009, 12:10am UTC

whimsical and free, this was written with happiness, that I could feel as I read it~~~ It is clear to see that you truly love to write~~~~~I love that, because I love to read and I love to write too:)
thanks for the smile:)

William Dotani Sep 20, 2009, 11:28am UTC

As a professor, I was very much pressured to write research papers. At first, this prospect bored me, but as I dug into the English language I started feeling great appreciation for the variables language offers. Language became my sandbox where I play.

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Wilma M. Oct 15, 2009, 10:42pm UTC

This may be about aging but it just gave me a carefree, drifting feeling of a happy summer day.

William Dotani Oct 17, 2009, 12:22am UTC

I'm glad you felt this.

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