Forgotten (cinq-cinquain)Poetry Please single...

Forgotten

Waiting

By the window

When will you come to me?

A lone wolf crouches in pity,

Lingers.

Hungry

By the wood pile;

Doomed heart beats fitfully.

Like me, it feels abandoned, lost,

Unfed.

Leaden

Willow branches

Creak under white powder.

Water drips from the eaves, rhythmic,

Heavy.

Silent

Cardinals clutch

Fraying twigs wishing wolf

Would turn its head so they could land

Quiet.

Sorrow

Nips at us four

Who seek comfort, relief.

I wonder if you feel me here,

Weeping.

cinq-cinquain= 5 stanzas; syllable pattern is 2,4,6,8,2. The first and last line should be related not the same.

Comments: 18

John Philipp Mar 15, 2008, 10:29am UTC

Well done, Mary. Thanks.

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J W. Mar 15, 2008, 12:30pm UTC

good poem

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Renee (Pres of Baby James Foundation) ~. Mar 15, 2008, 12:42pm UTC

Very well done

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Mary Z. Mar 15, 2008, 1:09pm UTC

Good grief! Talk about forgetting! Hope this makes it in, Tracey. If not, oh well, my fault. Sorry
Thank you all for your kind comments.

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Sheila Deeth Mar 15, 2008, 6:07pm UTC

This was very good. Lovely form. Lovely poem.

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Susan B. Mar 15, 2008, 8:52pm UTC

Stunning Mary!

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David Sidwell Mar 16, 2008, 12:59am UTC

This is very evocative, Mary. I love the question in the last stanza.

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Kathy W. Mar 16, 2008, 1:17am UTC

Mary, this is really beautiful. I am so ready for spring. This poem feels the whisper and power of that white powder, Like David, my fav is the last stanza.
Excellent work.
Wilka

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Tracey W. Mar 16, 2008, 8:03am UTC

Mary this is simply beautiful! The form really lends itself to the mood you are trying to create, or is it the other way around? In any event, I love it. Well done.

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